Wikipedia:Peer review/Riaz Ahmed Gohar Shahi/archive1
Riaz Ahmed Gohar Shahi[edit]
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because…
- I have tried my level best to make it upto the standard of wikipedia
- I have listed maximum possible citations.
- I have worked really very hard
- I want this to be one of the best of Wikipedia
Thanks, Asikhi (talk) 13:21, 1 March 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: An interesting article - here are some suggestions for improvement:
- The lead needs to be expanded per WP:LEAD
- This article needs a copyedit as it has many typographical errors and grammar issues. Examples in Lead - since he is dead, shouldn't it be in past tense (He was, not he is); need a space between ")" and "or"; references should come right after punctuation marks.
- In Etymology, is peace meant instead of piece, as a meaning of "Riaz"?
- It needs many more references - for example, the meanings of the names in Etymology, or important facts and direct quotations in the Life section.
- The article needs to be very careful to follow WP:NPOV - it seems to me to be more pro RAGS than anti, though it does present criticisms.
- Internet references need to have title, publisher, author (if known), and date accessed (see WP:CITE).
- I am not sure if the sources cited meet WP:RS or not - perhaps WikiProject Islam could help here? I do know reference 18, which claims to be "U.S. State Department Religious Freedom Report 2000" links instead to About.com, which is not a reliable source here.