Talk:Evil Queen (Disney)/GA1

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Reviewer: Zanimum (talk · contribs) 21:32, 28 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]


I'll take a look. -- Zanimum (talk) 21:32, 28 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I have not reviewed the references yet. They're always last. There's a lot of cleaning up that'll need to be done.

(Nominator's note: OK, please give me some time. I'm not the one who developed this article, I just came across and felt that it was quite solid. I'll try and see if I can do anything with it. ALittleQuenhi (talk to me) 07:26, 13 July 2014 (UTC))[reply]

Infobox

  • What's the Cell Block Tango?
Where is it?Forbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Olivia Wilde's portraits aren't mentioned in the article proper; infoboxes are meant as summaries of the article, not replacements.
  • Audley's audiobook appearance should be mentioned in Merchandise.
  • Has Disney officially said that their Original Movie should be considered canonical? Evvie's inclusion is suspect. If she had slipped a ring on Hades in House of Mouse, would you list the Lord of the Head as her husband?

Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs

  • Was she a queen before marrying the king? That's what your wording implies. I'd prefer "A mysterious and icily beautiful woman has gained her royal position by marrying a widowed king"
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Are there any readily accessible sources about the role of stepparents in literature? I know there are multiple RS on this common narrative.
  • I think it would be worth highlighting in a sentence or two any major narrative changes for the Queen.
  • "Her beauty is shrouded in ugliness and age; presumably, she has an ability to change back.[6]"
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • While you're citing a 2005 book as to the Queen truly dying, it would be good to find publication information for the 1936 novelization as well.

Conception, design and portrayal

  • "Notably, the Queen was the first character to ever speak in an animated film." You really should say "in an animated feature film", as it's possible people might not know the chronology.
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Abandoned concepts

  • "(featured in the film[30])" move this ref outside the parahenthesis
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "it is written in story notes" this whole segment can make its own sentence, it seems a little long for a fragment.
 DoneI guess - I don't see it at all.Forbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the torturers (described as "the Nubians")." --> "the torturers, described as "the Nubians"."
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • The end of the second paragraph is uncited. Is it from 9?
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Attractions and shows

  • "Snow White - An Enchanting Musical": en dash needed
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "practically stars" weasel words
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Disneyland rides/at various parks
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 17:42, 24 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • rambly over all
  • One Man's Dream: is it an interactive gallery or a show?
An interactive gallery, really.Forbidden User (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Film and television

  • "The were also" needs moving
  • References inside brackets.
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 17:42, 24 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Video games

  • "The were also"
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 17:42, 24 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Passing Cultural impact and Reception.

Influence

  • The Enchanted info should be a paragraph to itself. Move some of it up to the first paragraph, or create three paragraphs.
Could you please clarify this a bit?Forbidden User (talk) 17:42, 24 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Parodies

  • What about "?The Simpsons episode "Four Great Women and a Manicure" (2009),"?
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 17:42, 24 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Check the Simpsons episode page, and see whether any of the articles they use have reference to this. It would be preferable to have a reference here.
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 17:42, 24 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Both of the above could be applied to Family Guy, too.
 DoneForbidden User (talk) 17:42, 24 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Year of the Muppet comic book?
It's stated on cover images of the book that it is 2010.Forbidden User (talk) 17:42, 24 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Passing See also.

Books and comics, Merchandise, References remaining. -- Zanimum (talk) 18:25, 10 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • Verification issue with few sources that need Archive.org archives.
  1. http://d23.disney.go.com/news/2012/12/d23s-dateline-disney-1935-evil-queen/ - Source 16
checkY Archive url added. ALittleQuenhi (talk to me) 06:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  1. http://disney.go.com/vault/archives/villains/queen/queen.html - Source 15
checkY Archive url added. ALittleQuenhi (talk to me) 06:53, 27 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  1. https://play.google.com/store/apps/details?id=com.disney.dwarfs_goo - Source 74 - Dead since 2014-06-22
checkY Archive url added. ALittleQuenhi (talk to me) 06:55, 27 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Since all the reviewer's comments have been addressed, I'll pass this article. Wizardman 02:43, 20 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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