Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Franz Boas

Franz Boas

Boas is one of the founders of modern anthropology and responsible for the place "culture" and "cultural relativism" have in our society today, and is largely responsible for the scientific critique of racism. I put a lot of work into this article, but know that everything can be improved. Boas deserves a superb article. Slrubenstein | Talk 22:09, 31 August 2006 (UTC)

Yannismarou

The article is very informative and it is obvious by a person willing to do a great job. But it needs a lot of work if it s to go for GA or FA:

• I saw it is 69Kb. The size alone is not a problem. The problem is that most of this size is prose. And it is a huge prose. I'll come back to this issue.
• You have no in-line citations or you citate the wrong way (for instance (Boas, 1909 lecture; see Lewis 2001b.)). This is a great problem if you go for GA or FA. Check the FA criteria. In each paragraph you must have at least 1 citation or more. In general for citating check Wikipedia:Citing sources.
• You must also citate Boas' quotes. By the way I think you have too many of them.
• Within the prose you have afew external links. This is not recommended. You can create inline citations and link to them correctly. This is wrong:"...factor. (See [1].)..." This is better:"...factor..." Since you already have a section with external links, then in the main article link to them when absolutely necessary and preferably in citations.
• Sources and further reading must not be mixed.
• It is good if you add more photos. For the lead photo you can check some of the infoboxes for bios.
• The lead is way too short. Check WP:LEAD.
• The notes and citations section(s) go(es) before references and further reading.
• Alphabetize categories.
• Avoid one-sentence paragraphs.
• Sections like "Students and influence" are recommended, but are all these names necessary? I fell dizzy!
• Try not to have too many red links. If necessary, create yourself some stubs.
• You mention in the beginning the date of his death, but then I got lost. All these information about his theories obscure a bit the biography itself. I think you need a better organization and restructure of your material. I also think information about his later years and death should be better gathered.
• And now the most important for me: I told you that I believe your prose is already big. Some of your sections are too long and with a lot of material. They could easily consist seperate articles. For instance the section "cultural anthropology". In sections like this you can keep the main information and create links like this:
  Main article: cultural anthropology
  or
  See also: cultural anthropology
  See if such a solution fits in some sections of your article. Your primary goal must be the achievement of a good level of article flow (without, of course, omitting valuable information-it's a tricky goal!).--Yannismarou 07:15, 1 September 2006 (UTC)