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No Way Out (2007)[edit]

I've listed this article for peer review because I want this article to reach at least Good Article Candidacy. I want any comments/contributions possible to improve the article


Thanks,

04:31, 28 November 2007 (UTC)TrUcO9311 (talk)

  • A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style. If you would find such a review helpful, please click here. Thanks, APR t 02:46, 29 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I switched the order of some references around to comply with the Manual of Style. One thing that stands out from looking over the article quickly is that it switches between present tense (eg. Jillian Hill sings a song), past tense (eg. The match started off with John Cena...) and conditional tense (Shawn Michaels would then attempt...). An article like this should all be in past tense (ie. "Jillian Hill sang a song" and "Shawn Michaels then attempted..."), as the event happened in the past. GaryColemanFan (talk) 05:38, 29 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I've been doing some copyediting. A couple of concerns:
1) I don't understand this sentence: In the climax of the match, Nitro slammed Jeff onto the barricaded applying a facelock later in the ring.
Well I see what you mean, I mean to say "In the climax of the match, Nitro would slam Jeff onto the barricade, giving MNM control over the Hardys.TrUcO9311 (talk) 15:39, 29 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
2) Why would Jamie Noble, the third entrant in the Cruiserweight Open, enter after Jimmy Wang Yang, the sixth entrant?
Small ErrorTrUcO9311 (talk) 15:39, 29 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
3) "However, Kane recuperated and chokeslammed Booker following a pin, thus winning the match." This sentence seems to imply that Kane pinned Booker, then recovered and chokeslammed him.
Error as I see ill fix itTrUcO9311 (talk) 15:39, 29 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
4) Many of the references are lacking Access Dates.GaryColemanFan (talk) 06:15, 29 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I will get to that later today.TrUcO9311 (talk) 15:39, 29 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Just a quick glance - and I can see 6 - 7 images. You only need 2-3, in my view 6-7 is overkill. Davnel03 18:42, 30 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]