Wikipedia:Peer review/Mongol Empire/archive1

Mongol Empire[edit]

The series of articles we have on the Mongol Empire are simply not good enough to reflect a power that was the largest continuous land empire in recorded history, and that killed one quarter of the world's population in 50 years. After the Military Coordinator elections, I believe this is one area that needs immediate attention, and rewriting.old windy bear 13:15, 31 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

You are quite right. There are also several related articles which could do with a copy-edit. The Minist e r of War ^(Peace) 14:36, 31 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

This probably isn't the right place for this- Peer review is mainly for articles which are near-FA standard, not for ones which require wholesale revision. Since this article comes with a clean-up tag, I think it's the latter. Mark ¹ 15:19, 31 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Well, peer review is peer review, so let me give you my opinion: decide whether this article is about a former state or history of a certain country, and format it accordingly. Consider the difference between People's Republic of Poland and History of Poland (1945-1989) (FA). Good examples of the former states are FAs on Polish-Lithuanian Commonwealth and Indo-Greek Kingdom. At that moment this article is a cross between history and a state - this needs fixing.--Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus ^Talk 21:03, 2 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]