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Mahatma Gandhi[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to promote it as a FA. Please give me suggestions.

Thanks, RRD13 (talk) 10:57, 21 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Nikkimaria

Based mostly on the first few sections:

Dead link
Quite a few citations in the lead - see WP:LEADCITE
Quite a few harverrors in references - you might find User:Ucucha/HarvErrors helpful
You're mixing different varieties of English - should pick one and use it consistently
Several of the bottom navboxes use redirects to this article - can these be changed to direct links?
File:Portrait_Gandhi.jpg: when/where was this first published? Any image using a tag that bases copyright status on time since publication, publication date, or country of first publication should include this information - check the others
File:Gandhi_and_Kasturbhai_1902.jpg: source link is dead, need to demonstrate pre-1946 publication to show that it's PD in the US. Same with File:Gandhi_South-Africa.jpg
Several media have dead source links
File:Gandhi_Graffiti_San_Francisco.jpg: if the uploader is the photographer, he does not have the right to release the 2D artwork being represented under a free license
File:Gandhi_at_Darwen_with_women.jpg needs a different licensing tag. In general, look at cleaning up image licensing
"Gandhi's father was Hindu Modh Baniya and his mother was from Pranami Vaishnava family" - you will likely need to elaborate for the benefit of readers unfamiliar with the subject
"to study law at University College London, where he studied Indian law" - redundant
"observe the precepts of abstinence from meat and alcohol as well as of promiscuity" - as written, this could be read as "observe the precepts of promiscuity" - I think you mean abstain from promiscuity?
"The community adopted this plan, and during the ensuing seven-year struggle, thousands of Indians were jailed, flogged, or shot for striking, refusing to register, for burning their registration cards or engaging in other forms of nonviolent resistance. The government successfully repressed the Indian protesters, but the public outcry over the harsh treatment of peaceful Indian protesters by the South African government forced South African leader Jan Christiaan Smuts, himself a philosopher, to negotiate a compromise with Gandhi. Gandhi's ideas took shape, and the concept of Satyagraha matured during this struggle" - source?
Check capitalization - for example, "Boer war" should be "Boer War". Nikkimaria (talk) 16:49, 22 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Redtigerxyz's comments

The lead needs to be rewritten. UNDUE given to Partition in para 4

Redtigerxyz ^Talk 05:00, 13 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]