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Fire fighting in Finland

I've been editing this page for a while and would really appreciate comments from others. I'd like to know if there's information you would expect to find from the article and isn't included. Pasi 12:27, 18 August 2006 (UTC)

Some general observations: the lead needs to be expanded. You have two sentences now; turn these into two full paragraphs. There needs to be a History section. This can talk about the start of organized fire fighting in Finland. Some of the sections and subsections have too many lists. You can keep those in there, but beef them up with more prose. The last two sections need to be expanded. For Equipment, you can talk about the types of vehicles (automaker and stuff like that) used and so on.UberCryxic 04:12, 19 August 2006 (UTC)

Thanks for the comments. I already worked on the lead a bit. I'll write up about the history once I find some sources (might have some books at home, will have to see). Same thing with the lists, I can beef them up but I need to try find some sources. Always fun to write when you know the information is right but you don't have any written source for it. :) Pasi 10:09, 20 August 2006 (UTC)

I just did a brief copyedit to try and improve word flow...there should be a reduction of the factoid style if possible and an expansion of the major themes. Examples of large fires would be helpful as would any areas of concern such as accident rates, fatality rates number of hectares burned annually...that sort of stuff.--MONGO 17:23, 22 August 2006 (UTC)

Thanks. The large fires idea is good, I'll see if I can find information about biggest recent and historic fires in Finland, should be easy enough. Accident rates are available from the ministery of the interior's website, I'll add them when I get back home (I'm out of town atm). Pasi 19:59, 22 August 2006 (UTC)