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Darren Osborne

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I've listed this article for peer review because i am interested in getting the article to feature status. The article has recently been through two good article revies and is now at good article status. Any recommendations for improvement to the article would be appreciated.

Thanks, D4nnyw14 (talk) 16:34, 9 January 2012 (UTC)

The alt text for the main image could be fixed. MayhemMario 12:45, 4 February 2012 (UTC)

Im not sure the Alex Carter quote should be in the first part of the main lead. MayhemMario 14:40, 4 February 2012 (UTC)

Yeah, reading the lead again, the Alex Carter part in my opinion is not meant to be in the first paragraphy, maybe the second or third? MayhemMario 13:41, 19 February 2012 (UTC)

Removed it completely from the lead as the first part of the lead is about the actors who have played him and i don't think it would fit into any other part of the lead. D4nnyw14 (talk) 13:54, 19 February 2012 (UTC)

• "Darren later helped his father to fake his own death as part of a scam, which drew comparisons to the John Darwin disappearance case", 1. Maybe link his father? 2. And what? Did it attract negative reception? MayhemMario 13:47, 19 February 2012 (UTC)

Linked his father and the comparisons were criticising the storyline for echoing the case, i'll explain it in the lead D4nnyw14 (talk) 14:10, 19 February 2012 (UTC)

• In HO articles, do you not put the actor/actress name in brackets behind the characetrs name?
• Maybe link "shotgun marriage".

Were to? D4nnyw14 (talk) 14:10, 19 February 2012 (UTC)

Forced marriage#Shotgun wedding. MayhemMario 14:32, 19 February 2012 (UTC)

Thats about marriage because the woman is pregnant while Hannah wasn't pregnant, they just thought it'd be a good idea at the time and they were drunk. D4nnyw14 (talk) 15:37, 19 February 2012 (UTC)

• Ashley Taylor Dawson has received numerous awards and nominations for his portrayal of Darren, no need to include full actor name, Dawson will be fine.
• A lot of linking issues. By the time ive got down to the "fatherhood" section, I've forgotten who Suzanne is, etc. MayhemMario 13:47, 19 February 2012 (UTC)

I don't know what can be done about this, were not supposed to link to the same article more than once, i might be wrong on that though. D4nnyw14 (talk) 17:51, 19 February 2012 (UTC)