Wikipedia:Peer review/Buffy the Vampire Slayer/archive1

Buffy the Vampire Slayer[edit]

Recently I was impressed with the Featured Article for The Simpsons, and in the past few days have made a few rearrangements to the article Buffy the Vampire Slayer in the hope that it might be on its way to becoming a Featured Article. What do people think this article needs doing to it for it to stand a good chance of achieving this? Any problems with formatting? Enough footnotes? Any particular sections need improving? ..and so on. Would appreciate advice about the article. -- Paxomen 16:07, 11 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I'd follow the example of Seinfeld in the introduction, and its Overview section in particular. There could be a more narrative order to the various sections, which admittedly will be a heavy undertaking. Don't forget some of the character pages, especially those of the main characters, are pretty damned good, too. Xiner 18:49, 11 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I had a stab at rewriting the intro;

Original intro - Buffy the Vampire Slayer is an American television series based upon the 1992 film of the same name. The original concept, screenplay, and TV series were created by writer-director Joss Whedon under his personal production tag, Mutant Enemy Productions. The show's title is often abbreviated simply to Buffy or BtVS.

The series follows the life of the Slayer, Buffy Anne Summers, latest in a line of young women chosen to battle against vampires, demons, and other supernatural foes. Buffy is often aided by her Watcher and her loyal circle of friends, dubbed the "Scooby Gang".

The first five seasons of the series aired on The WB. After a network change, the final two seasons aired on UPN. The series now airs daily in worldwide syndication. The series finale aired in May 2003.

Rewritten intro - Buffy the Vampire Slayer is an American television series, that originally ran from March 10, 1997 until May 20, 2003. The original concept and TV series were created by writer-director Joss Whedon under his personal production tag, Mutant Enemy Productions. Sarah Michelle Gellar starred as the title character, whilst the ensemble cast around her grew during the course of the show.

The series follows the life of the Slayer, Buffy Anne Summers, latest in a line of young women chosen to battle against vampires, demons, and the forces of darkness. Like past slayers, Buffy is aided by her Watcher, however unlike her predecessors she surrounds herself by a circle of friends who join her cause (dubbed the "Scooby Gang").

Despite maintaining relatively low ratings (typically lower than 90th place per week), the series was critically acclaimed and attracted considerable media attention. Along with Dawson's Creek, Buffy is often associated with the early success of the Warner Brothers Network.

When you mention that sections need a more narrative order. Do you mean that some of the section are too much like lists? -- Paxomen 00:02, 12 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

There definitely should be an intro before the TOC -- probably something that shows the importance of the show. And yes, I find that the sections are currently too much like lists. They should instead flow from one to the next with the help of prose. - Xiner 01:08, 12 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Rearranged the start so that the intro is above the contents. Yeah many of the sections are quite list-like, but shall be attempting to make this less so whilst this review continues. - Paxomen 01:35, 12 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

NOTE: This article has been nominated to be a featured article: Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Buffy the Vampire Slayer -- Paxomen 18:28, 21 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]