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Battery (electricity)

Previous peer review

• A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for August 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I have worked on this for a while and am planning to nominate it for GA as soon as I've fixed all the problems. In particular:

• How does the lead look? How could I improve it?
• Before, I thought "Classification of batteries" (now called "Types of batteries") was too long, so I moved a lot of the content to List of battery types. How is the current section ("Types of batteries")?
• How is the organization? Does the article cover all major aspects? Any trivial info that should be removed?

Thanks, King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 19:05, 26 August 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs):

• Tip on expanding the lead—Make sure there is at least a sentence for each section in the article summarizing the contents and important details in that section.
• Battery capacity and discharging section: Combine some of the stubby paragraphs.
• Sentences needing sources (among others):
  • This paragraph:"Secondary batteries must be charged before use; they are usually assembled with active materials in the discharged state. Rechargeable batteries or secondary cells can be recharged by applying electrical current, which reverses the chemical reactions that occur during its use. Devices to supply the appropriate current are called chargers or rechargers."
  • "Because of vibration, shock, heat, cold, and sulfation of their lead plates, few automotive batteries last beyond six years of regular use."
  • "Hole formation in the plates leads to less surface area for the current-producing chemical reactions, resulting in less available current when under load. Leaving a lead-acid battery in a deeply discharged state for any significant length of time allows the lead sulfate to crystallize, making it difficult or impossible to remove during the charging process. This can result in a permanent reduction in the available plate surface, and therefore reduced current output and energy capacity."
  • "The main benefit of the lead-acid battery is its low cost; the main drawbacks are its large size and weight for a given capacity and voltage."
  • "Special "reserve" batteries intended for long storage in emergency equipment or munitions keep the electrolyte of the battery separate from the plates until the battery is activated, allowing the cells to be filled with the electrolyte. Shelf times for such batteries can be years or decades."
  • "When a battery is recharged at an excessive rate, an explosive gas mixture of hydrogen and oxygen may be produced faster than it can escape from within the walls of the battery, leading to pressure build-up and the possibility of the battery case bursting."
• Get the article copyedited by someone unfamiliar with the text.
• Format all the references—add publisher, publisher dates, works, etc.
• Trim the external links and leave only the essential ones. See WP:EL.
• Information to add: How is a battery made?

Hope these comments help. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:48, 1 September 2008 (UTC)