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1994 Atlantic hurricane season[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to know what it needs before FAC. –Juliancolton ^Tropical ^Cyclone 05:14, 22 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Here are some suggestions for improvement, mostly nitpicks just from the lead. Seems to need a copyedit to meet Criteria 1A for FAC, content and refs and images seem fine.

Needs a comma:The first tropical cyclone, Tropical Storm Alberto[,] developed on June 30, while the last storm, Hurricane Gordon, dissipated on November 21.
Missing a verb / phrase here: During the year, a total of seven named storms, and 3 hurricanes [developed?]; the season was rather unusual in that it developed no major hurricanes, a hurricane of Category 3 status or higher.
Could the first sentence be expanded a bit and the third sentence be shortened to avoid redundancy? So The 1994 Atlantic hurricane season was a below-average Atlantic hurricane season that produced seven named tropical cyclones, only three of which were hurricanes. ... The season was rather unusual in that it developed no major hurricanes, defined as Category 3 status or higher. (I think numbers below ten are to be spelled out)
Link Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Scale in the lead (first occurence)
I think Tropical Storm Debby killed nine people throughout its path in September. would be clearer as In September, Tropical Storm Debby killed nine people throughout its path.
The sentence Extreme flooding and mudslides caused approximately 1,122 fatalities in Haiti. needs to be linked to Gordon better.
The December nor'easter is only in the lead and not in the article at all. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself
With a some polish I think this will make a fine FA, but I do not think the language is there yet. Read it out loud slowly. Get a copyedit.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 17:09, 25 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done with everything. Thanks for the helpful comments, and sorry I didn't respond sooner—I forgot to add this to my watchlist. –Juliancolton ^Tropical ^Cyclone 22:56, 7 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]