Template:Did you know nominations/Rempo Urip

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The result was: promoted by Jolly Ω Janner 08:08, 1 February 2016 (UTC)

Rempo Urip[edit]

Rempo Urip, 1954
Rempo Urip, 1954

Created by Crisco 1492 (talk). Self-nominated at 10:43, 6 January 2016 (UTC).

  • Its long enough, neutral and well referenced. The hook fact is offline/AGF. The image is OK (50 years in Indonesia). Interesting guy. Could not really check paraphrasing as most sources are not accessible. Id suggest adding "film director to the hook" (but do feel free to use the hook as is) or ...

I thank its unusual that he is mentioned as a football player in the lede as that seems a minor bit when I read the article. But can I thank you for another contribution. Victuallers (talk) 15:46, 6 January 2016 (UTC)

  • It says he began his career with the troupe as a footballer and extra; the two are clarificatory as to the nature of his career with Dardanella, as otherwise the reader may assume he was a playwright/acting coach. ALT is fine with me, but original still preferred as more "hooky". — Chris Woodrich (talk) 15:59, 6 January 2016 (UTC)