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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 09:37, 4 April 2015 (UTC)

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Imphal War Cemetery[edit]

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Imphal War Cemetery in Imphal, Manipur

ALT1: ... that not only casualties from the United Kingdom are buried in the Imphal War Cemetery?

Created by Nvvchar (talk). Self nominated at 12:16, 12 March 2015 (UTC).

  • DYK checklist template
General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems

Hook eligibility:

Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.
QPQ: Done.

Overall: This article seems well researched and well cited. I did not discover any paraphrasing or copyright vios. Other core requirements were checked and were okay, with possible exception of hook. However, the author's usage of English shows that it is not their native language, and the article suffers somewhat from that. An example is the use of "martyr", which usually designates one who dies for a religious belief rather than a war casualty. Use of "of" instead of "from" in the list of casualties is another. While such misusage is not a disqualifier for DYK, a copyedit would help. So would a link to the Battle of Imphal.

Because the present hook is bland (though properly cited), I had a try at supplying another at ALT1. As an American military history buff who has never heard of this battle, I believe it needs further exposure, even if through a subsidiary article such as this. As I am now unable to approve this review because I supplied ALT1, I am free to perform the suggested copy edit if the nominator agrees. Article should be good to go with slight amendments.Georgejdorner (talk) 17:49, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

  • Thanks. The AlT1 Hook needs a little more expansion with words "but also from India and many other Commonwealth countries". It could read as ALT2 hook: ... that not only casualties from the United Kingdom but also from India and many other Commonwealth countries are buried in the Imphal War Cemetery? You are welcome to copy edit.--Nvvchar. 07:49, 16 March 2015 (UTC)
  • Okay, I gave the article a light copy edit. While I designed ALT1 to provoke curiosity, your suggested ALT2 tells all. Let the viewer read the article to find out who else is buried there. It has been my experience that viewers will click a DYK to satisfy their curiosity.
  • Final reviewer needed, to approve ALT1.Georgejdorner (talk) 15:12, 16 March 2015 (UTC)
  • ALT1 is gtg. Applause for Georgejdorner, nice work here. --Tito Dutta (talk) 01:09, 30 March 2015 (UTC)
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