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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:17, 19 September 2021 (UTC)

Benjamin William Page

HMS Caroline off Shakespeare Head, by Thomas Buttersworth
HMS Caroline off Shakespeare Head, by Thomas Buttersworth

Created by Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk). Nominated by A. C. Santacruz (talk) at 16:26, 5 September 2021 (UTC).

  • The article is new enough and long enough. I assume good faith on the references that I can't access. The image is fine. A QPQ has been completed. However, I don't see the hook in the article. I see "In May 1803 he was sent in the frigate, with secret orders announcing the start of the Napoleonic Wars, to the East Indies where his patron the now Vice-Admiral Rainier was still commander-in-chief." and "The war being very new, Page was able to use his awareness to his advantage". It seems likely to be the case, but that would be synthesis. SL93 (talk) 09:38, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
  • Fair. Would changing the wording help? I agree on the synthesis point. An alternative:
ALT1: ... that Admiral Benjamin William Page was tasked with announcing the start of the Napoleonic Wars to the East Indies, using HMS Caroline (pictured)?
I'm not sure if "tasked" is the appropriate word here but do let me know what you think of this ALT SL93 A. C. Santacruz Talk 09:57, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
Approving ALT1. SL93 (talk) 10:04, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
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