Talk:Walt Judnich

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 23:17, 8 June 2020 (UTC)

Criteria

1. Prose  On hold

2. Verifiability  On hold

3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass

4. Neutral ✓ Pass

5. Stable ✓ Pass

6. Illustrations ✓ Pass

7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass

Comments

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• "where he had a .274 batting average in 109 games." - Go ahead and link batting average here as the first mention in the prose. It's linked in the lead, but some users skim the lead, so it's not a bad idea to link at the first place in the prose, too.
• " In 1937 he was again promoted to the Oakland Oaks of the Pacific Coast League" - Comma after 1937
• "as well as his hitting in the clutch" - Go ahead and link to Clutch hitter, although that article is in horrible shape
• "as well as his hitting in the clutch" - MOS:NUMERALS
• " and promoted to Corporal in October" - I write a lot of MILHIST stuff, and generally ranks aren't capitalized unless they're used as a title (i.e. "Corporal Walt Judnich")
• "nd a benefit game against players from the Pacific Coast League," - Link the PCL
• "He split time between center field, right field, and first base" - Link right field
• "He only played in ten games for the Pirates, and in May his contract was sold to the San Francisco Seals, ending his major league career." - What league? I'm assuming the PCL, but it should be stated outright
• "and played in 25 before his contract was sold to the San Francisco Seals," - I'm assuming "games" goes after 25.

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• "which included a batting average of .360 after the All-Star Game" - I didn't see this in the source, did I miss it?
• " Judnich also finished 14th in MVP voting with 14 votes.[6]" - Source says he was 16th in the MVP voting
• "He only played in ten games for the Pirates, and in May his contract was sold to the San Francisco Seals, ending his major league career." - [citation needed]
• "Baseball in Wartime" appears to be the personal website of Gary Bedingfield, is Bedingfield a subject-matter expert?

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Placing on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 16:26, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

Issues mostly fixed. for the .360 average it is in the gamelogs for that year, which is a little tricky to cite since you'd have to highlight the appropriate section to see it. To be safe im trying to find a news source that says that verbatim, if not I'll at least cite the log. For the baseball in wartime cite, Gary Bedingfield has written a couple published books on that specific subject, so im confident in his reliability at least (he was a keynote speaker for the World War II museum at one point per here, which cements it to me). If the website itself is the issue, since i can't directly find the site noted in other sources, i can replace the ref since I found the same stuff he wrote in the biography in other news articles (if there's something specific you'd like to show reliability I'll do my best to find that; I used the source a lot more on my other GAN so best I know now if it's not as reliable as I thought). Wizardman 17:12, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

Looks like Bedingfield is a respected expert in the field, so the use of his site should be acceptable. Hog Farm (talk) 17:17, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

Sounds good; I added in the game log ref so everything should be good now. Wizardman 21

08, 9 June 2020 (UTC)