Talk:Typhoon Fengshen (2002)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 18:29, 15 December 2012 (UTC) Since I like low impacting storm articles, I will do the review. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:29, 15 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

" By July 15, Fengshen attained typhoon status, and after initially moving to the north, it began a movement toward the northwest" using the words "moving" and "movement" in the same sentence seems weird, I suggest you change " began a movement" to "turned". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:29, 15 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"While near peak intensity, Typhoon Fengshen underwent the Fujiwhara effect with Typhoon Fung-wong," the Fujiwhara effect" seems weird here, suggest it to "a Fujiwhara interaction", but that is just my opinion. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:29, 15 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"In the country, Fengshen dropped heavy rainfall and produced heavy rains" redundancy. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:29, 15 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"This was after much of the convection had dissipated over the center.[4] " I'd merge this sentence with the previous sentence. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:29, 15 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, it is good. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:29, 15 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Took care of all of these but the Fujiwhara effect. I think it works fine as it is, but if you feel strongly about it, I can change it. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:34, 15 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Does this need anything else? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:04, 18 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]