Talk:Tropic Thunder/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

The article's looking very good - definitely not far away from becoming a GA. Just a few little comments:

  • The film had a large marketing promotion, including showing numerous screenings, selling the fictional energy drink advertised in the film, and posting faux websites for the characters, films, and products shown in Tropic Thunder - just seems kind of odd that the sentence begins with "the film" but ends with "Tropic Thunder".
I did that because of the "films" included in the list before it sounded redundant. I modified it a bit, but if you can think of a better alternative, I'm welcome to any suggestions. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good as is. —97198 (talk) 09:46, 3 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • received generally positive reviews with 83% and 71% approval ratings according the review aggregator websites Rotten Tomatoes and Metacritic - this makes it sound as if RT and Metacritic are doing the same job, which they're not. RT calculates the percentage of positive reviews, while Meta calculates the average score of reviews.
That is described in the reviews section, would you like me to modify it here as well? --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Maybe just briefly state in the lead something along the lines of "... with 83% of reviews positive and an average normalized score of 71% according to..." - how does that sound to you? —97198 (talk) 09:46, 3 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Changed as suggested. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:51, 3 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Unbeknownst to the actors, they were dropped - tense should never be past when writing about fiction. "Are" or "had been".
Nice catch, changed to "are". --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Spell out DEA, POW and RPG on first occurrences.
Fixed. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • After Lazarus and Sandusky discover that the Speedman is leading them - is "the Speedman" correct?
Fixed. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • term in Speedman's contract that entitles him a TiVo on location - "entitles him to", maybe?
Fixed. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • We need some consistency between first names and surnames - in the same paragraph, "Kirk" will go to "Lazarus". Just sweep through and make sure either all the characters are referred to by surname or all by first name.
I believe I caught them all. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 02:42, 3 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • During the filming of Vietnam veteran "Four Leaf" Tayback's (Nick Nolte) memoir - are we missing a "John" that's included in the cast/character list?
Fixed. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • How about "Cody Underwood"'s full name in the plot section?
Fixed. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Downey said on CBS's The Early Show - link station and show.
Wikilinked. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 02:42, 3 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link fat suit on first instance under casting not Cruise's section.
Fixed. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I personally wouldn't classify "Premiere and release date" as part of a film's production. And I'm sure you're very familiar with it, but maybe check out WP:MOSFILM ;)
Good idea, I added it to the beginning of the new "Release" section. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 02:42, 3 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "see related section below" is a dead link.
Fixed. --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • there were no protests present - seems to make more sense as "no protestors present" or "no protests held". IMO, anyway.
Changed to "no protests held". --Nehrams2020 (talk) 18:57, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, looking great. The GAN will be on hold for a week so good luck with making changes in that time! —97198 (talk) 13:47, 1 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work. Looks like a GA to me! —97198 (talk) 13:47, 4 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]