Talk:Ray of Light (song)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: My love is love (talk · contribs) 18:15, 11 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi 11JORN. I will be the reviewer of this article. I must confess that I really admire all the work you do on all the articles about Madonna and I have to admit it that you do an amazing job.

Lead

Rock music in the first paragraph is not linked to its article.
The last sentence in the introduction is too long. Try to divide it into smaller ones by using full stops.

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Background

phoned him and suggested him to send some songs to Madonna - Repetition of him, try to improve this sentence if possible.
Also the next few sentences after the aforementioned one have the word "track" too many times. Try replacing it with song or "Ray of Light".

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Composition

According to sheet music published by Muscinotes.com, - I think you're missing a "the" here.
spanming - spanning.
After Evita there is an unnecessary quotation mark.

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Critical reception

Madonna: Like an Icon should be linked in the composition section as it appears for the first time in the body of the article there.
He ends ris review by sating - his, stating.
After you cite what the reviewer from Idolator said you should use an apostrophe (') instead of the quotation mark (").

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Accolades and recognition

Again there is an overuse of the word song in the last sentence

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Chart performance

In the United States, "Ray of Light" was the highest debuting single - Clarify whether it was Madonna's highest debuting single or the highest debuting single of the year.
Try to replace the repetition of "The song" in the first paragraph.
Similarly in New Zealand, the song also debuted at its peak number nine on the RIANZ Singles Chart, and reaching a peak of number two after three weeks. - peak position of, reached.
According to the Official Charts Company, "Ray of Light" has sold 275,000 copies in the region - Clarify when was this stated.

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Music video

The cities where the video was filmed should be all linked to their articles or not. Also Stockholm, Sweden should be changed to Stockholm only as you only list the cities.
Madonna commented that when she makes an album, she puts her soul on it, but a music video is a lot more working with a director. - I think you need quotation marks in "puts her soul on it" or paraphrase it in the way she said it.
She commented is used in two sentences in a row. Try to change the beginning of one of them.
A few days later, Italian director Stefano Salvati ... - A few days later after what?
If you can find any information about how the accusations finished feel free to add them.

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Live performances

wearing an Indian sari, - I think the comma should be changed with a full stop
Link Hindus, Yogis.
A spokesperson for Madonna stated that the singer did not understand why the World Vaishnava Association was upset. She hadn't done anything insulting, and did not wished to insult anyone - Remove the full stop and add "as".
and urged all the fans to jump all through the song - I think you don't need the second "all".

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Cover versions

Link The Chris Moyles Show.
I think that She commented would sound better if you replace it with "Bedingfield commented".
Peter is seen in the - I think you should change it to Peter Griffin.

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Despite these small mistakes, it is a very nicely written article. Putting it on hold for seven days. My love is love (talk) 18:15, 11 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I went ahead and did most of the fixes requested, and will let 11JORN address the remaining ones as I wasn't sure how to do so myself. Just thought I'd lend a hand with other bits. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 20:25, 11 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I have done the remaining issues. Thank you! Alex ^{talk page!} 22:59, 11 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Great job. Passing. My love is love (talk) 07:43, 12 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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