Talk:Pilot (House)/GA1

GA Review

I'll be reviewing this article. As this article has already tried for FA, I expect to be able to finish the review fairly quickly. – sgeureka ^t•c 16:16, 26 September 2008 (UTC)

Most of the stuff below are suggestions and not GA-fail-worthy (I am a very thorough reviewer); fixing them should also be quick (it should be obvious what needs fixing and what can be ignored). I also think that, apart from these minor issues, this article is Feature-worthy.

• Images: Image:HousePilot.jpg is tagged for deletion. Even if you can figure out why the bot did that (it obviously has a fair use rationale), I don't think the image shows anything important (who is this person?) so that it would not pass WP:NFCC#8 (Significance).
• Lead:
  • "The episode was filmed in Canada." - where exactly? Is this special from other episodes?
  • ""Pilot" was watched by approximately seven million viewer" - maybe note that this is for the original broadcast
• Plot:
  • Am I right in the assumption that Dr. House already has his team together when the show starts? (Sorry, I'm a House newbie and don't know what happened in the first three seasons, although I watched the pilot once several years ago.)
  • I'm not sure whether the meaning of "misanthropic" is widely known and if it should be linked
  • '"taking such strong medicine so frequently"' is not that POVish and doesn't need quoting, I'd say
  • The sentence beginning with "During his rant on the effects of steroids" awkwardly uses the word "steroids" twice
  • "neurologist Dr. Eric Foreman (Omar Epps) breaks into Adler's house with Cameron" sounds like Cameron is used as a crowbar
  • It is not clear what Wilson being Jewish (and Adler not) has to do with the plot - is it because they are supposed to be cousins? (My knowledge about religion or religous practise is fairly limited. Or did I miss something in the text?)
• Production:
  • "but FOX turned down this interpretation ..." - this and the next sentence use the word "turn" three times.
  • You have probably already worked on it, but "David Shore wrote the first episode.[3] The pilot was shot in Canada.[4]" really seems too short for a stand-alone paragraph and should be merged into the paragraph above. Again, what's up with the sentence about Canada (it lacks context to be useful)?
  • I'd swap the sentence fragments about the casting video to something like the following for better causial flow: "At the time of the casting session, actor Hugh Laurie was filming Flight of the Phoenix. He put together an audition tape of his own in a Namibian hotel room, the only place with enough light, and apologized for his appearance (which Singer compared to a "bin Laden video").[3]"
  • "not realizing Laurie is British[5]" - missing punctuation.
  • "Laurie assumed that Wilson was the star " - redundant with previous sentence
  • I am not sure that "cerebral hero" stands for - my bet is on the hero who solves the riddles? (I may also just be not familiar with it if it's a common metaphor)
  • Maybe repeat who Robert Sean Leonard plays, for the people like me who are terrible with remembering names
• Reception:
  • "House's premiere episode was well received" - maybe add the word "generally" because there were also very negative reviews.
  • "Alessandra Stanley of The New York Times said that though they might be a turn-off to some viewers" - who "they" (I guess the characters, but it's not entirely clear)
  • "The series was considered by critics" - "Critics considered the series" may work better
• External links:
  • Six ELs looks a bit much for an episode article, but if this is common practise for House articles, I haven't said a thing.
• Sources;
  • The reel.com review gives the name of the reviewer. -> add it

Can't find anything else; good job all in all. If you feel you have addressed the above concerns in as far as you think is necessary, please leave a quick note here (it's on my watch list), and I'll promote this article as soon as possible. – sgeureka ^t•c 17:11, 26 September 2008 (UTC)

Comment

Hi Sgeureka, I've did what you asked, to answer your question, yes, Dr. House already has his team together when the show starts. Please reply, --Music26/11 09:51, 27 September 2008 (UTC).

The only critical thing now is the info box image, as its significance (WP:NFCC#8) is still not clear. The plot doesn't mention anything about Adler riding the bus (probably because it is insignificant), and if it's just about showing what the actress looks like, the image would fail WP:NFCC#1 ("No free equivalent", which is usually untrue for living actors). I am totally fine with allowing one unfree screenshot in episode articles, but WP:NFC is getting stricter all the time, so this issue should be fixed better now than later. (Either remove the image, or replace it with another screenshot that is referred to in the Plot section). – sgeureka ^t•c 11:14, 27 September 2008 (UTC)

I've replaced the image with a better one. --Music26/11 11:41, 27 September 2008 (UTC)

Much better. I am going to do the bureucratical stuff for GA-promotion now. Please consider reviewing another article yourself at Wikipedia:Good article nominations to help free up the continual backlog. Well done. – sgeureka ^t•c 11:57, 27 September 2008 (UTC)