Talk:Lucas Ocampos

Lucas Ocampos has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: November 27, 2016. (Reviewed version).

A fact from Lucas Ocampos appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 20 December 2016 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that the €11 million reported to have been spent by AS Monaco FC in 2012 to sign Lucas Ocampos, was the most ever for a Ligue 2 player?

A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2016/December. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/Lucas Ocampos.

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GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Lucas Ocampos/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:38, 25 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I will be reviewing this against the GA criteria as part of a GAN sweep. I'll leave some comments soon. JAGUAR 17:38, 25 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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Checking against the GA criteria[edit]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
The lead requires an expansion for it to summarise the article. For an article this size I would say that it needs at least a paragraph and not just one sentence, per WP:LEAD

"Having started only 7 matches by the end of January 2015" - seven (I think in this case it needs to be written out)

"where he paired up with compatiot Marcelo Bielsa" - I don't know what this means

Ref 24 is missing an access date
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
No original research found.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

The only thing holding this back is the length of the lead. It needs to be expanded to at least a paragraph (a few more sentences should do it) for it to meet WP:LEADLENGTH. Other than that, it is well written and comprehensive so it should easily pass afterwards. JAGUAR 13:04, 27 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Edits[edit]

Hi Jaguar (talk, thanks for reviewing the article. I have made the following corrections as per your above recommendations.

The lead has been extended and gives a broad overview of his career so far with key points.
'7' has been changed to 'seven'
I have added an access date to ref 24
'compatiot' is meant to read 'compatriot' - Bielsa and Ocampos are from the same nation. I have corrected the spelling thereof.

Cheers, Liam E. Bekker (talk) 16:04, 27 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the responses! I've checked through the article again and I'm happy that it meets the criteria now. I thought it might of meant 'compatriot'...

JAGUAR 21:22, 27 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]