Talk:K'Andre Miller/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 02:41, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Copy changes

Lead

• Change "whom" to "which"
  • Done.

Early life

• Does (MLB) need to be included if it is not to be mentioned again in the page? The other acronym recitations make sense, as they are repeated later.
  • It does not, good catch.

Playing career

• Remove comma after "team rules"
  • Done and moved ref to the end of the sentence.
• Remove comma after "7 seconds of ice time per game"
  • Done.

International play

• "Miller has represented" — likely should be past tense
  • Done.

Personal life

• Remove comma after "throughout his hockey career"
  • Done.

Awards and honours

• It would be more appropriate in this case to use American English for the header.
  • Whoops, you're right!

Other items

• Earwig catches organization names and recitations of stats, e.g. three goals and 14 assists for 17 points. Not a major issue.
• The lone image on the page is freely licensed, though it is missing a |alt= tag.
  • Only part of the FA criteria, but added anyway. I am admittedly not great at alt text.
• References are archived.
• No BLP violations.

Summary

@GhostRiver: Just needs a few copy changes, the type that fresh eyes after nearly two months can catch. Putting on hold; ping when revised. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:54, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Sammi Brie Changes addressed, thank you! — GhostRiver 03:14, 30 January 2022 (UTC)