Talk:Ghostbusters II/GA1
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Reviewer: CodexJustin (talk · contribs) 15:50, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
My review of this article actually started several days ago and I'm really not seeing much which needs commentary in this review. I would like to see the critical reviews section cleaned up in its comparison with the lede, since the lede is calling it "mixed reviews", and I just don't see any evidence for that in the critical reviews section in this article which are on the negative side. Also, there are updates on completion dates for the 2020 sequel which is currently slated for summer, July 2020, which can be updated in this article. Once you do these, let me know and the rest generally looks fairly good. Images are all checked, and the bibliography is in good shape, showing a well edited article. Let me know when you can get to the critical reviews section. CodexJustin (talk) 15:50, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
- Hi Codex, thanks for reviewing this. I've reworded the lead because I wrote that before doing the review section. Apart from reviewers liking MacNicol the reviews were generally negative. I've also added an extra line about the sequel. Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 18:53, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
- That looks good. Some small comments on the writing. In the second paragraph of the lede, my suggestion would be to condense its first sentence by dropping the subordinate clause starting with the words "particularly Murray who believed that sequels were...". There is already plenty on Murray in the main body of the article. Also, note that you have 2 giant sentences in the main body of the article over 50 words long. The opening sentence in the Design section is over 50 words long, and the opening sentence in the Release section is over 50 words long. You might want to look at these. Overwise the article looks pretty good. Nice illustrations and thorough coverage. I am going to leave this open over night to see if any other editor might like to comment. Pretty well done with your 300+ edits on this article. CodexJustin (talk) 19:14, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
- Fair points, I have amended them. GBII is currently on the waiting list for a GOCE copy edit so that I can look at taking it to FA after GA, so these minor niggles will be hammered out by them but I will have a quick read through to trry and catch any more. Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 20:55, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
- Overnight edits by you look good and no other editors seem to have raised any issues overnight. The GOCE review request is fairly high in the list and I recommend that you update your comment field there to request that an FA level GOCE reviewer do the copy edits at this time since I am promoting the article at this time. I have been thinking of getting the "2001: A Space Odyssey" film article to go for FA nomination as well so I may see there at the FAC. I don't know how you found time to do your 300+ edits on this Ghostbusters2 article though it has benefited the article in a good article way. CodexJustin (talk) 15:17, 20 September 2019 (UTC)
- Fair points, I have amended them. GBII is currently on the waiting list for a GOCE copy edit so that I can look at taking it to FA after GA, so these minor niggles will be hammered out by them but I will have a quick read through to trry and catch any more. Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 20:55, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
- That looks good. Some small comments on the writing. In the second paragraph of the lede, my suggestion would be to condense its first sentence by dropping the subordinate clause starting with the words "particularly Murray who believed that sequels were...". There is already plenty on Murray in the main body of the article. Also, note that you have 2 giant sentences in the main body of the article over 50 words long. The opening sentence in the Design section is over 50 words long, and the opening sentence in the Release section is over 50 words long. You might want to look at these. Overwise the article looks pretty good. Nice illustrations and thorough coverage. I am going to leave this open over night to see if any other editor might like to comment. Pretty well done with your 300+ edits on this article. CodexJustin (talk) 19:14, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you CodexJustin, and I'm a bit OCD, I wasn't going to work on the article but then I started and couldn't stop til it was finished. And let me know if you do take 2001 to FA, I'll be happy to review it. Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 17:19, 20 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Darkwarriorblake: I've just done another read through of 2001 and it looks like its ready for FAC. Earlier this year I read a new 400 page book on the film and I've added a new section to the article with updates to many of the sections. What works as a starting time for doing the review, and I'm assuming that a regular FAC nomination will set it up for you to start your review there. Let me know when you have a preferred time frame to start. CodexJustin (talk) 14:49, 21 September 2019 (UTC)
- Whenever is fine, I have to wait for another week until I can nominate another article for FA as I've just finished one nomination. But whenever will work, I'd only be one review among many for an FA nomination. Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 17:28, 21 September 2019 (UTC)
- The FAC is started and I have pinged the 5 top editors for the article who should receive notifications soon. Good week-end in the meantime. CodexJustin (talk) 19:26, 21 September 2019 (UTC)
- Whenever is fine, I have to wait for another week until I can nominate another article for FA as I've just finished one nomination. But whenever will work, I'd only be one review among many for an FA nomination. Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 17:28, 21 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Darkwarriorblake: I've just done another read through of 2001 and it looks like its ready for FAC. Earlier this year I read a new 400 page book on the film and I've added a new section to the article with updates to many of the sections. What works as a starting time for doing the review, and I'm assuming that a regular FAC nomination will set it up for you to start your review there. Let me know when you have a preferred time frame to start. CodexJustin (talk) 14:49, 21 September 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you CodexJustin, and I'm a bit OCD, I wasn't going to work on the article but then I started and couldn't stop til it was finished. And let me know if you do take 2001 to FA, I'll be happy to review it. Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 17:19, 20 September 2019 (UTC)