Talk:Eldon League/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Z1720 (talk · contribs) 00:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi, I will be reviewing this article shortly. Please ping me if you have any questions. Z1720 (talk) 00:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Unfortunately, I do not think this article is ready to become a good article. Below, I will outline some concerns that cause me to reach this conclusion:

• The article relies on one source for most of its information, which is a newspaper article. I think this article needs to source more works to gather and verify its information.
• I searched WP:LIBRARY for sources, and found "Champagne-cork duel decides the feudal vote" by Craig Seton published in The Times on June 5, 1975. I also suggest looking through other databases to find additional sources. EDIT: Another source I found was The Past is Not a Foreign Country which you can borrow for free from archive.org when you register an account. Z1720 (talk) 00:48, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
• There isn't a "History" section, so I do not know when this group was formed or if they still exist today. This should be added.
• The "Views and aims" section feels disorganised, with a single-sentence paragraph about anti-feminism, then a paragraph mostly consisting of quotes, then a general list of aims. I think this section should be organised with the first part explaining their over-arching philosophy, then subsequent sentences and paragraphs describing specific policies of the group. Also, the views and aims section should reduce the amount of quotes in the section and instead paraphrase the group's aims.
• I would remove the BBC Archive Facebook post as a reference, and instead try to find the reference on the BBC website, which is considered more reliable than a Facebook posting.
• Per MOS:OVERSECTION, shorter sections should be merged together or expanded upon. The Connections section should be merged with other information, and I suggest expanding upon the Legacy section.
• The lede contains information that is not in the body of the article. Per MOS:LEDE, the lede should be a summary of the article's information. All information in the lede should also be present in the body of the article.

I hope the above helps. I am going to close this review so that you are not rushed to make improvements. Z1720 (talk) 00:39, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for the comments, they are really appreciated! Unfortunately, I can't find much about the history of the group. I really appreciate the archive.org reference, as I probably would not have found it otherwise. I've also tried to look for a better source for the BBC Archive Facebook post, but can't find it. But the Facebook post is from the official BBC account so it should be seen as reliable. Merged content from the lede into that of the rest of the article. —AFreshStart (talk) 08:37, 31 January 2022 (UTC)