Talk:Caesars Palace/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:56, 11 December 2015 (UTC)
I'll start reading through this now. JAGUAR 20:56, 11 December 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments[edit]
- "Opened in 1966 after four years of planning and construction" - best to start this sentence with something like It was opened in 1966... or First opened
- "which was originally built at a cost of $95-million for Celine Dion's show A New Day... in 2003" - comma needed in between "show" and "A"
- "stunt performer Evel Knievel arrived at the hotel to watch a boxing match and was convinced Sarno that he could jump" - delete "was"
- " In September 2015, Caesars Palace agreed to pay the Financial Crimes Enforcement Network (FinCEN) an $8 million civil money penalty for violating the Bank Secrecy Act (BSA)" - FinCEN and BSA aren't mentioned in the article again, so I'm not sure why these abbreviations are here
- "A 20 feet (6.1 m) high statue of Julius Caesar hailing a cab" - 'taxi' might sound more informal, although I'm not sure if "cab" is preferred in the US
- "It was made in Bangkok, Thailand, with a casting ceremony on November 25, 1983, according to the inscription on it" - this sentence doesn't have a citation
- "WIFI access and shoeshine services are available for an additional charge" - WiFi
- "Celebrities like Paris Hilton and Christine Aguilera" - Christina
- "The featured desert is spotted dog" - it's spotted dick?
- Spotted dog -it's a gimmick I think, it means spotted dick.
- "the restaurant must be limited to service five days a week, to which Caesars agreed" - how about to which the management agreed?
References[edit]
- Ref 143 redirects to its main site
- Other than that, no dead links and the refs are all formatted correctly
Many thanks for taking this on, given the limited time left before his anniversary!♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:16, 11 December 2015 (UTC)
On hold[edit]
Those were all! of the prose issues I could find during my review of the article. Nice work on this! It's well written and comprehensive. I love Caesars Palace now! JAGUAR 21:28, 11 December 2015 (UTC)
All answered for Jaguar, some good points, cheers. Considering the status of this place it really lacks scholarly/decent material aside from the typical Vegas touristy type stuff and news stories/snippets in books. There should be a detailed book on its history and architecture but there isn't. I guess because the main point is the gambling! We've done pretty well considering though I think, though I'm sure somewhere there's a lot more material which could be added.♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:32, 11 December 2015 (UTC)