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Reviewer: Novice7 | Talk 07:59, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Really good! Here are some issues:-

Lead[edit]

  • Link country pop, singer-songwriter?  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • The song was written entirely.. — not "entirely", but "solely".  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Upon released as a promotional single — "Upon its release as a promotional single", would be better.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • although neither has confirmed nor denied these allegations — neither of whom?  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • The song was a "big" success in United States — try "The song was successful in 'the' United States.."  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Swifts performed 'Back to December'" in a series.. — "Swift has performed.." typo "Swifts" → "Swift". And series? Remove "series of" and add some other word instead of series.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Background[edit]

  • Back to December addresses a first for Swift, in that she had never apologized to someone in a song before. — reword.
I reworded it into ""Back to December" is an apology to a former lover in the form of a song, something that she has never done before" Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "According to Swift, the lyrics were written as an apology to a former boyfriend, commenting.." — Split the sentence after comma.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Based in certain aspects of the song's lyrics, like the time line and some physical descriptions — I didn't get that.
Already reworded into : "Based from the lyrics, critics have speculated that ..."  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Maybe you should re-title it to "Background and release"  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Composition[edit]

  • "the other song is Haunted" — change to 'the other being "Haunted".  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • You typed "apologize" here, but in Background it is "apologise". Be consistent.
I changed it and used "apologize".  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lyrically, it is about somebody who was incredible to her, just perfect to her in a relationship, and she was really careless with him, so these are the words that she would say to him that he deserves to hear. — change that sentence.. Seems there are too much commas. Try splitting.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the song's couplets" — needs a "writing" or "noting" after couplets.
I paraphrased the sentence.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception[edit]

  • Roughstock gave the song four stars — out of how many stars?
Out of five.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • praised repeats. Try "complimented" or "lauded"  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Entertainment Weekly review was already mentioned in Composition. Remove that.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance[edit]

  • "number six on the Billboard Hot 100 due to of sales of" — due to "of"? Remove "of". Also, maybe "Billboard Hot 100 with sales of"?  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • A comma is needed after downloads on  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • In its sixth week, it has climbed to number forty-three — Maybe, "the song has since reached a position of number forty-three"?  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Internationally, the song "has" moderate success — "has"? Maybe "has had"  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • a "the" is needed before Canadian Hot 100  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances[edit]

  • Swift first performed "Back to December" on October 18, 2010, in Paris at a showcase — rearrange . First venue, then date.  Done
  • "set to release on the October.." — "set for release on October.."  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Next sentence also same as first. First event, then details. Like, "Swift performed the song on (the event's name), (details like what is it), which was streamed...  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Swift also performed Back to December on several occasions. — "on several other occasions".  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "as B+ in the Los Angeles Times" — "a B+ by the Los Angeles Times". Also, not "noted", but "noting"  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is it a mashup or a medley?
My mistake. It's a medley, not a mashup. Already fixed.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Same with LA Times.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Following promotion" — remove that. And, change to "Swift also performed"  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Track listing[edit]

  • The EU track list is a duplicate of the US. Remove that.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Charts[edit]

Good

Release history[edit]

Good

Media[edit]

  • Why don't you link a sample?
I already uploaded 34 second sample of the song and added it in the article.  Done — MyDecember (talk) 12:29, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
No... Reduce its length. Maximum for Back to December is 30 seconds (per WP:SAMPLE). Novice7 | Talk 12:52, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Alright. Fixed. I shortened it to 22 seconds.  Done— MyDecember (talk) 13:02, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Links and references[edit]

  • No DAB
  • No Dead Link
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