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Hello, Sjensen!

I'm an online ambassador for your WMST 250: Women, Art, and Culture (2014 Q3) class and have just stopped by to provide a quick review and add what I hope will be helpful comments.

You've got a great start to your article about Anne Mozley, particularly by developing a great list of sources for the article. I've got a couple of comments to help make this ready to be an article and to complete your assignment.

Regarding sections for the article, you may want to look at User:Apdame/sandbox for basic sections including the introduction or lede, which has a summary of the article and occurs before any of the sections. Another example, just to get a feel for encyclopedic tone and the type of content is Anne Moncure Crane.
It would be great to see more specific information about: what she's written and any education or influences she may have had.

I made a couple of minor edits as examples of encyclopedic tone, use of wikilinks, and addition of specific details. By the way, I couldn't find an image of Anne Mozley easily, either, but you may be able to add an image of one of her books, like this or this under PD-simple.

I'll check in on you again, and I'll be watching this page if you have any questions or comments.--CaroleHenson (talk) 03:23, 31 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Im helping too and per chance I live near Derby. Victuallers (talk) 18:13, 17 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Many of your sentences begin with the same word. For example three of the sentences in a row begin with the word "she". I would suggest changing that around to make the sentences flow better together. Amsinger (talk) 19:28, 19 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

You may want to put the last paragraph under Major Works under it's own heading since it isn't really about her major works but instead about some of her beliefs/arguments. Amsinger (talk) 19:40, 19 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

hmmm do feel free to fix it, your last edit was great. Victuallers (talk) 20:09, 19 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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I fixed some grammatical and spelling errors in your article but very good over all. Jo v 123 (talk) 00:23, 26 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

There was some inconsistency spelling and grammar, punctuation, and sentence fluency. I also added some more important Wiki links. Great job overall. Agilmer1 (talk) 04:41, 26 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]