Talk:Alexander Mahone/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Looks good, with only a few things that need fixing:
- Mahone is introduced in the premiere of the second season as a Special Agent - "special agent" should only be capitalised when written as a title, i.e. "Special Agent Mahone"
- Mahone causes Abruzzi's death - how?
- ordering him to surrender Westmoreland's money and his boat - Westmoreland's first mention
- information on all the Company's agents and operations - capital "The" for consistency
- his son has been murdered, and being a wanted criminal, he is arrested - commas work kind of like brackets here so this should read "and, being"
- an unofficial operation to recover Scylla from the Company - "The"
- forcing them to go on the run - could you think of a better way to word this?
- quickly discovering the secret of Michael's tattoos and his plans - link to tattoo (Prison Break) as the tattoo is hitherto unmentioned
- between Mahone and Les Miserables's character - use {{'}} after "Les Miserables" so the apostrophe isn't italicised
- "a lot longer" than he originally thought - "than he had"
Nice work! I'll put the GAN on hold so you'll have a week to make changes. Good luck :) —97198 (talk) 01:31, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. :) See diff, hopefully all issues have been addressed (properly). Corn.u.co.pia / Disc.us.sion 02:23, 5 January 2009 (UTC)