This article is within the scope of WikiProject Weather, which collaborates on weather and related subjects on Wikipedia. To participate, help improve this article or visit the project page for details.
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Puerto Rico, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of topics related to Puerto Rico on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Puerto RicoWikipedia:WikiProject Puerto RicoTemplate:WikiProject Puerto RicoPuerto Rico articles
Will review, hopefully comments will be posted this weekend. Mark Arsten (talk) 19:45, 1 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments: I made some copyedits when I went through, hope I didn't damage anything. Unsurprisingly, the article is in pretty good shape, only a few small issues I can point out:
"In addition to the deadly landslide in Mameyes, the floods killed several people due to a washed bridge near Coamo." This reads a little awkwardly to me, I'd suggest something like, "In addition to the deadly landslide in Mameyes, the floods washed out a bridge near Coama, killing several people."
"These totals broke the 24 hour rainfall records set during the 1899 San Ciriaco hurricane,[1] and represented nearly half of the annual precipitation totals." I was a little confused by this sentence, do you mean that totals were about half of the average annual rainfall for the area?
"The landslide destroyed about 90 houses, killing 130 people;[6] however, the death toll could have been as high as 300." I'm a bit confused here, do you mean that it could have killed a lot more people (had they not evacuated), or that the death toll is uncertain?
Mostly that it was uncertain. The landslide covered a certain number of houses, but a lot of the bodies weren't found, so the death toll wasn't 100% certain. The same thing happened with Katrina, as it was uncertain whether people were washed away or just moved. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Just a suggestion, but the last paragraph of "Aftermath" maybe be better suited as the middle paragraph.
"However, in 2011, residents of Ponce successfully petitioned to change the name from a park to a memorial site." Might want to note the proposed new name.
Actually, the new name only changed the official title from "Park of the Recollection of the Neighborhood Mameys" to "Memorial of the Recollection of the Neighborhood Mameys". I didn't see the need to rewrite that whole thing, when the only thing changed was the status from a park to a memorial. How should I make that clearer? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, I guess it's fine as it is. Mark Arsten (talk) 19:21, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
