Talk:Human interactions with microbes/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 19:17, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I propose to take on this review and will read the article in detail soon. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:17, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:23, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I was looking at the other "in culture" articles you have been working on. Insects in culture has a "Context" section and I like that, something to introduce the background to the article. In this article, you do of course mention some of the article's scope in the lead, but then the lead is merely meant to be a summary of the body of the text.

Added Context section. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:19, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I like it. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:17, 28 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I was also wondering whether the article is correctly titled or whether something along the lines of "Microbes and their relationship with man" would be better. The "In literature, music and art" section was more what I was expecting to find from the article title.

We could rename it to Microbes and man either now or just after this process, as you prefer. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:59, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I will leave that to you to do as you think fit. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:17, 28 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'm leaving the lead for the time being but couldn't help noticing the amusing spelling mistake in the third sentence.

Woops! Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:55, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"is used to modify plant materials" - some of the things you list in this sentence are not plants.

Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:55, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

In food production, the use of yeast to create carbon dioxide to cause bread to rise, does not seem to be mentioned (increased palatability?).

Added. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:00, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Microorganisms are used for many commercial and industrial production of chemicals, enzymes and other bioactive molecules, often through protein engineering." - This sentence needs attention.

Reworded, hope that's better. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:00, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"The practice of hygiene exists to prevent" - This is a strange way of expressing it, as if "hygiene" was around and waiting to be discovered.

Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:56, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Extended. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:33, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Very good. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:17, 28 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Extended to reflect article contents. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:19, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

You mention domestic animals and crops in the lead but not in the main text. Plant viruses, bacterial and fungal diseases impact production and sometimes livelihoods, such as Phytophthora infestans which is currently decimating my tomato crop. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:17, 28 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Added a summary of plant pathology and tweaked section headings accordingly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:35, 28 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The article is well written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
The article uses many reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research.
The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.
The article is neutral.
The article is stable.
The images are relevant and have suitable captions, and are either in the public domain or properly licensed.

Nice work! Cwmhiraeth (talk) 14:13, 28 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:17, 28 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]