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Bryan Ferry[edit]

In April 2007, the Ferry article was reviewed, and it kept its B-status because "No linline citations, several sections marked as stubs, and a short lead keep this B class.". Since then, lots of references were added, sections rewritten, information added.

I believe Bryan Ferry's article could become an A-class article. Because there is no (copyright-free) image of Bryan Ferry available, and some other things still remain unsolved (what did his father exactly do? how many albums did ferry sell?), it is currently not A-status. But the article has improved a lot since the last review. I would like to have a new peer review for the Bryan Ferry article, to see how far the article is from an A-article (or Good Article).--Pie.er 13:47, 30 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

DrKiernan[edit]

Please add {{persondata|PLEASE SEE [[WP:PDATA]]!}} along with the required parameters to the article - see Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.[?] DrKiernan 09:35, 3 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Added! --Pie.er 11:04, 3 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou[edit]

  • Yes, the luck of a picture is a flaw, but not a definite obstacle for upgrading. But aren't there any free-use pictures?
  • The lead needs some expansion per WP:LEAD to summarize the article.
  • "Before Roxy Music (before 1971)" is stubby and the prose is choppy.
  • The way "Early Roxy Music (1971-1976)" is written is more about Ferry's relationships that about his music!
  • "After lengthy ("debilitating"[cite this quote])". This needs fixing.
  • "Following his split from Lucy, British newspapers photographed Ferry with Katie Turner, 35 years younger than Ferry, naming her as his new 'girlfriend'.[18][19][20][21]" Maybe you should think about merging these notes as I did in El Greco or Sandy did in Tourette Syndrome.
  • Get rid of the "See also" section incorporating its only link into the main text, if you think this link is necessary.
  • I see no analysis or critical approach of Ferry's music, just an exposition (detailed indeed) of his career and albums, but this is not enough.
  • You could also think about including samples of songs of him in the article as I have seen in other music-related articles.--Yannismarou (talk) 16:05, 18 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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