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Xenomorph (Alien)[edit]

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I'm giving this article an overhaul but am having trouble figuring out the right balance between "in-universe" and "out-universe" description. Would appreciate links to any GA or FA level articles on fictional creatures for inspiration. Thank you. Serendi ^pod ous 12:30, 25 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Some GA's you might find useful: Cyberman, Sarlacc, Time Lord.--jwanders^Talk 05:32, 4 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments:

The references to internet sources all need to give the title (not just the URL), publisher, author (if known), and date accessed.
I think the basic idea of WP:IN-U is that it should always be made clear these creatures are part of a series of works of fiction. Thus the sentence "Described by Science Officer Ash as "…survivor[s], unclouded by conscience, remorse or delusions of morality",[1] aliens are primarily predators." would probably read better as something more like "In Alien, the character Science Officer Ash describes the original alien as a "…survivor, unclouded by conscience, remorse or delusions of morality",[1] aliens are depited as primarily predators." Do not italicize quotations either (per MOS). I don't think every sentence has to make it clear this is in a movie or movies (or comic book or novelization), but probably every paragraph should.
I also think that even when explicit references to the films are not made, the wording should still be careful to avoid sounding too in universe. Make use of "depicted (as)", "shown as", "portrayed (as)" - i.e. Alien blood is [depicted as] an extremely potent acid...

Hope these ideas are helpful, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:51, March 17, 2008 (UTC)