Wikipedia:Peer review/University College, Durham/archive1
University College, Durham[edit]
I feel this is a decent bodied article, that now needs a review to perhaps check on its writing style and what further information could be given. Is it possible for it to reach featured status (i.e. how close is it and is the subject notable enough to have enough relevant info?) --Robdurbar 08:36, 9 October 2006 (UTC)
- Some thoughts on what I'd personally like to see in the article
- First of all the article needs a spell check, I corrected a few errors in the opening paragraph and there are more throughout.
- I also didn't like some of the use of commas. Some of the sentences/clauses come across as very clunky.
- In the 1st paragraph is it correct to say that University College is in the Castle when not all of its buildings actually are?
- Comparison of this college with the other Durham colleges (academic & sporting maybe?)
- More/better pictures of inside the college buildings
- A map/plan showing where the castle and other buildings are in Durham in relation to the other colleges
- Explanation of the origin of the crest and motto
- 'Formal' in the picture caption needs replacing with 'Formal Meal'
- Can there be more about what makes this college different from any other one, maybe college clubs, sports teams etc.?
- The part about the buildings could be expanded, maybe taking some info from the Castle article. Is the inside mostly still castely or has it mainly been converted to look like more modern buildings?
- How do tourist & students interact? JMiall 18:15, 10 October 2006 (UTC)
- Thank's for that. I've given it a thorough spell check and addressed one or two of the other issues bought up. I think it's fair to say that it is located 'in' the Castle - that's where its offices and reception are, for example - but I've clarified in the intro anyway.
- The grammar/structure could probably do with going over; I tend to overuse commas/semi-colons and as I have written the vast majority of the text, it will have suffered from a lack of proof-reading etc. from other editors.
- Crest/pictures are being worked on, at least that gives me something to focus research on! --Robdurbar 11:20, 12 October 2006 (UTC)