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There's No Place Like Home (Lost)

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I've listed this article for peer review because… the season finale for Lost's fourth season, while it's already in good shape, I've recently considered pushing the article to FA status. I added new data, replaced some dead links and fixed some parts of the reception section. It would be widely appreciated more input on what the article needs.

Thanks, igordebraga ≠ 16:36, 30 November 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• Original air date in the infobox omits Part 3. In fact, it seems this is the case in the lead as well. Is it worth saying early on why it's called "...Parts 1, 2 and 3" yet you make no subsequent mention of "part 3" anywhere?
• Infobox again, "Episode 12, 13 and 14", should be "Episodes".
  • It's automated, no way to put the "s".
• Is there a reason why just three things in the lead are directly cited? I think there's a general FA trend to move away from referencing the lead, simply because there should be nothing in the lead that isn't expanded upon (and therefore cited) in the main body of the article.
• "escape the island ... moves the island"... reads a little repetitively.
• Last thing on the infobox, are "Guest stars" those which the credits call "guests"? Just wondering why we have a bunch of non-notable actors playing characters like "Guy in car" listed here.
• Is "Numbers" really capitalised? The link used doesn't appear to capitalise it.
• "island, i.e. whether" picky, but not at all keen on "i.e." here, not terribly engaging.
• You could link the strike by pipelinking "strike".
• Any reason to link Ugly Betty but not Gray's anatomy?
• Ref 31 seems to not link directly the stuff you're trying to reference.
  • Ref 30 now. Still a problem. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:35, 19 December 2011 (UTC)
• Aha, I've just found and read Note A, kind of makes sense now... I wonder if the note should come right after the article introductory sentence...
• In that note, you have an ugly in-line reference, this should be turned into a normal reference.
• Don't mix date formats in the references.
  • All dates in refs should be in one format only. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:34, 19 December 2011 (UTC)
• "18-49" in various references should use an en-dash, not a hyphen.
• Kristin dos Santos doesn't have a capital d in her dos.
  • Ignoring this comment? The Rambling Man (talk) 19:36, 19 December 2011 (UTC)
    • I fixed only on the ref, missed the one on the article body...

The Rambling Man (talk) 09:58, 14 December 2011 (UTC)