Wikipedia:Peer review/TRAPPIST-1/archive1

TRAPPIST-1

I've listed this article for peer review because I just did a major expansion on the article and wanted to get second opinions on whether the new version is OK to people. I was also thinking of sending this article to FAC or GAN [after some cleanup] but I have never written an astronomy article before so I'd like to get some assistance from editors with experience in that field.

Thanks, Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:20, 16 November 2021 (UTC)

Comments by CactiStaccingCrane (talk)

• TRAPPIST-1: The star should be Star only; Potential atmospheres should be Planet atmospheres

  Did the first, went with "of the planets" for the second since stars also have atmospheres. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

• Kepler should never be italicized

  Deitalicized. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

• Notes should be incorporated to the article. I like the idea of explaining words this way, but usually a wikilink is suffice.

  In some places (the Featured article process) folks will want more than a link to explain what an article's jargon means. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

• External links should be cleaned up

  Did some cleanup. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

• My suggestion is to break up the paragraph. It would look like a wall of text on mobile, and is just unpleasant. I also suggest consise writing. Example:

The intense UV radiation - both "far" UV and XUV, which includes X-rays - can efficiently remove water from the planets, by splitting water molecules into hydrogen and oxygen and heating the upper atmosphere until they escape from the planet.

Intense extreme ultraviolet and X-rays can make water escape from planets, by splitting and heating into hydrogen along with oxygen gas.

That's done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

• Three or four planets – e, f, and g or d, e, and f – are located inside the habitable zone. should not be bolded. Bolding only used for the title in the text.

  Hmm, I think highlighting the names of the planets is probably better here. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

• Gallery images should be get rid of, adding more images to illustrate the sections would be better

  Moved one image and one video up. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

Courtesy ping: @Jo-Jo Eumerus: -- CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 08:24, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for the comments, CactiSaccingCrane Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

@CactiStaccingCrane: Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:49, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

Nice work on Trappist-1! If you'd like, you can comment on SpaceX Starship peer review as well, where you can find extra aspects of the article that is missing. CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 13:54, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

Put a comment in. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 16:03, 22 December 2021 (UTC)