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Hymn of the Russian Federation[edit]

I been wanting to make an FA on a Russian subject, and due with me working with a user on a off-WP project related to this anthem, I got the encouragement needed to work on this article. I tried to make this article like My Belarusy, the Belarusian anthem (also an FA), and I also introduced a succession box for the anthem history of Russia. While, of course, y'all are welcome to comment and suggest about anything to your hearts content, but I wish to ask specifically if we should fork out the "adoption" section into a larger article about the Anthem debates and if the pictures I used are OK in the copyright department. Thanks again. User:Zscout370 (Return Fire) Fair use policy 03:18, 26 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! I have a couple of comments:
  • In the definition, you say: "Russian: Государственный гимн Российской Федерации, Gimn Rossiyskaya Federatsiya". I am not sure what you meant by "Gimn Rossiyskaya Federatsiya" - were you going for a transliteration of the Russian name? If so, it'll need to be corrected. Let me know if you need help with that.
  • The translation of the anthem is very good, but it's not perfect - there are a couple of lines where the translation is inexact. For example, "Братских народов союз вековой" is translated as "Fraternal peoples, a union for the ages". It is grammatically incorrect (it should be "A union of peoples", not "peoples, a union") and inexact: "союз вековой" means a union that lasted for centuries, not a union that will last for ages.
Hope this helps. Please, feel free to contact me through my Talk page. CasualFighter 16:30, 9 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I screwed up with the transliteration, but the translated lyrics were already there when I got to the article. I will ask the webmaster of Hymn.ru to see if I can use his translation (Vadim Makarov is a personal friend of mine). If you want to fix the translations too, that will be perfect, since I am only ru-1. Thanks again and if there is anything else I am missing, please let me know. User:Zscout370 (Return Fire) Fair use policy 21:11, 9 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Sounds good. I'll fix the translation if you won't be able to get a better one. CasualFighter 22:09, 9 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Translation was put in, transliteration fixed by users fimilar with WP:RUS, so I think the article is ready now. User:Zscout370 (Return Fire) Fair use policy 01:55, 10 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, looks good. CasualFighter 17:21, 10 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]