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Home stored product entomology[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because…with an artical of this nature specificity and precision is exceedingly important. All parts of this artical are open for peer review. Comments or contributions correcting or clarifying a meaning or an idea are appreciated and requested.

Thanks, Crosenbalm (talk) 21:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

The title could use some work, not sure anyone will stumble upon this one by accident!
Nothing besides redirects links here.
WP:HEAD should help with section heading names.
Images should be sized per WP:MOS#Images.
16 references for an article this size is inadequate.
Second para of lead is referenceless and wikilinkless.
"More information is to be published in Nature on 2008-03-27. [2]" - that's in the past now, and remove the space before the citation.
Convert units using the {{convert}} template.
Numbers below 10 should be written out in full.
12-18 days - 12 to 18 days or, worst case, 12–18 days.
Avoid spaces between citations per WP:CITE.
FDA handbook examples are a little over the top for me. Just explain how the FDA handbook works, what it talks about... you don't need these examples, all nine of them!
Eradication and prevention sections are linkless... very dry reading.
Conclusion? It's not a formal scientific paper, it's an article in an encyclopaedia.

That should be enough to be going on with. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]