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Bill Gates

Previous peer review

I've listed this article for peer review because, having spent over two years refining its prose and references and being a significant contributor, I believe that receiving suggestions to enhance the article to FA-class status would be immensely valuable. Gates played a pioneering role in the microcomputer revolution of the 1970s and 1980s. Additionally, he oversees the world's largest private charitable foundation. I look forward to collaborating with the community to enhance the article and elevate its overall quality.

Thanks, MSincccc (talk) 15:33, 18 April 2024 (UTC)

Tim O'Doherty

Up to Post-Microsoft:

• His father was named William H. Gates II, but he is now generally known as William H. Gates, Senior to avoid confusion with his son. - Citation needed
• a national bank president - can we have the name of the bank?
• a home that was damaged by a rare tornado when Gates was seven years old - how reliable is this source?
• According to Gates, when he was young, his parents wanted him to pursue a career in law - I don't think the second comma is needed or the "when he was young". Do we need "according to Gates": is there a reason as to why he might not be reliable here?
• Link bugs?
• Recommend merging paragraphs 4 and 5 in Early life and education.
• which Gates has described as - "which Gates described as"?
• National Merit Scholar - should this be capitalised?
• didn't - MOS:CONTRACTIONS: "did not".
• Gates never returned to Harvard to complete his studies needs a ref
• You've linked Microsoft in the second paragraph of BASIC, but could be linked in the first instead.
• he wrote an Open Letter to Hobbyists -> "he wrote An Open Letter to Hobbyists".
• The last two paragraphs of BASIC are very short: can they be combined elsewhere?
• after Gates's mother, Mary Maxwell Gates - you've already given us her name and linked it before.
• IBM's discussions with Digital Research went poorly, however, and they did not reach a licensing agreement - is the ", however," needed?
• It was the prestige brought to Microsoft by IBM's adoption of their operating system that would be the origin of Microsoft's transformation from a small business to the leading software company in the world - seems oddly worded
• on November 20, 1985, in an attempt - I'd drop the comma
• it's a neat hack - is the link to Hacker culture right?

@Tim O'Doherty Should this be removed -Gates's maternal grandfather was J. W. Maxwell, a national bank president. Also, what should I do about point number 3 mentioned above?

It's your choice whether to keep it or remove it. I'm asking if the source cited to that info is reliable and high-quality enough for an FA. Tim O'Doherty (talk) 17:52, 20 April 2024 (UTC)

@Tim O'Doherty Would you continue reading till the end of the article and provide further suggestions? It would be great if you could do so. In the meantime, I had make some required changes. Regards. MSincccc (talk) 18:27, 20 April 2024 (UTC)