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The list was not promoted by Dabomb87 22:54, 20 January 2010 [1].

List of Case Closed episodes (season 17)[edit]

Nominator(s): DragonZero (talk · contribs) 11:06, 19 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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I am nominating this for featured list. I realize that my grammar has a lot of issues and this being a mystery episode list can be confusing so all criticisms appreciated. I have a lot of time to fix up the mistakes. DragonZero (talk · contribs) 11:06, 19 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments The image does not have a proper WP:ALT. FUR looks line. (how would someone who is blind and unfamiliar with the series know what "Conan Edogawa" looks like. The Alt should be generic. The summary of ep 494 is too long (over 300 words and longer than all the rest). The rest of them seem fine, at under 200 words each on a quick check. A copyedit really should be done before an FLC is started. A few points from the lead that I noticed:

  • "In Japan, the series is titled Meitantei Conan (名探偵 コナン?, Detective Conan) but was changed due to legal issues with the title Detective Conan" - was changed where? when? by who? not very clear. Also, the kanji/romaji seems unnecessary. Since it is licensed in English, what about the English release?
    • Fixed it. Well I just know that episodes 104 and up are not licensed by Funimation, so I left it blank.
  • it states it is based on the manga, but not which part? Can it be limited to chapters X-Y or does it jump around too much to say much more than based on?
    • I could probably limit it between two volumes, but it might seem like original research.
  • "The episodes' plot covers the adventures of teenage detective Shinichi Kudo who was turned into a child by a poison called APTX 4869. He continues to be a detective under the alias Conan Edogawa. The episode plot covers the FBI's confrontation with the Black Organization, a mysterious Criminal Syndicase and is then followed by Conan's usual adventures." - episode plot said twice. Suggested alternative: "The series focuses on the adventures of teenage detective Shinichi Kudo who was turned into a child by a poison called APTX 4869, but continues working as a detective under the alias Conan Edogawa. At the start of the season, he works with the FBI as they confrontation with the criminal syndicate, the Black Organization, before the episodes return to a more episodic formula."
    • Thank you
  • "Episodes 491 to 523 were later collected into ten DVD compilations by Shogakukan. They were released between September 26, 2008 and August 28, 2009 in Japan" - makes it sound like only a partial release was done, yet it seems like that is the entire season. Why not just say, "The thirty-episodes were released in Japan across ten DVD volumes by Shogakukan between September 26, 2008 and August 28, 2009." should probably also note that the episodes were not released in the same order they aired.
    • I think I fixed it.

Did not check the episode summaries grammar. -- Collectonian (talk · contribs) 23:50, 20 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Quick comments – Also haven't looked at the episode summaries.

  • Near the end of the first paragraph, is the FBI what I think it is (Federal Bureau of Investigation)? If so, spell it out fully and link it.
  • Space needed after first sentence of second paragraph.
  • "by Mai Kuraki starting episode 521 for the rest of the season." Grammar here leaves something to be desired. Try "by Mai Kuraki starting episodes 521 through 523"?
  • In several of the references, I don't believe an external link to the Japanese Wikipedia is needed for Being Inc. If this is a notable entity, I see no harm in having red links, or just not linking the publisher if red links are a concern. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 00:24, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment Refs 3-6 need to have the language specified. Afro (Not a Talk Page) - Afkatk 07:33, 17 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Did it, Cite episode template doesn't have Languages section though so I can't add it on. DragonZero (talk · contribs) 08:12, 17 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Ah my bad then. Afro (Not a Talk Page) - Afkatk 08:20, 17 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
{{ja icon}} - I was thinking if it'd be good to add this template at the beginning of those templates. Afro (Not a Terrible Joke) - Afkatk 09:29, 20 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
ja icon shouldn't be used in front of any reference nor behind it. It was discussed on the cite ep template to add a language and it had support...but no one apparently wrote the code or did the edit protected request. -- Collectonian (talk · contribs) 16:10, 20 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
well I thought I'd throw that idea out there anyway. Afro (Not a Terrible Joke) - Afkatk 18:36, 20 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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