User talk:Tsotiffany/sandbox

References[edit]

Hello Tsotiffany! I have briefly read the article so far, and it looks pretty good really! Apart from it, you have got a great expansion there :) Zoono92 (talk) 19:12, 31 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Zoono92 (talk) 19:15, 31 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

sooo just cuz i had loadz of timee.. i changed the referencing styleee... hope you like it! However, please go ahead and undo the revision if you don't prefer it (I won't mind)...Otherwise, everything else looks good to me :) Zoono92 (talk) 20:53, 31 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Little Problems and Fixes[edit]

Hey guys, The article is really interesting and well written. There were a few mistakes a corrected, and I also added a heading to your references. Under "Base Rates and Prevalence" there are some good stats, you guys should use something from there for your DYK I think!! Also, under the Symptoms, I made the list a bulleted list, as I found that easier to change (feel free to change it if you do not like it). Here are a few "problems" I found:

Under "Suicidal Intent" where the sentence starts as follows "In 1997 etc..." - that part is missing a reference so please make sure you add that.
Under "Signs" everything is captioned, and does not really sound like a sentence, please fix this
Under "Treatment" there is "[28]" found in 2 places, which I am assuming is a reference, but please make sure you reference this as an inline citation as this is how the wikipedians like them.

Good job over all :) Carina1205 (talk) 22:53, 31 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

This is weird, I added something to this talk page and it got deleted :( Khyati Gupta (talk) 15:37, 1 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Review[edit]

Great job so far! I like the use of a lot of facts and statistics. You'll definitely be able to use one of those for a DYK hook. Be careful with spacing when formatting your article. In the beginning of the article there are a number of spots where the sections where the return key has been hit unnecessarily (perhaps accidentally or copy and paste from Word?). Very small detail but just be sure to delete some of those spaces. There are a few sections under "Treatment" that have not been referenced and that may be flagged so try to find some work to back up what you are saying there. Finally, I noticed that your references are primarily unlinked. You may want to provide either the PMID or a link to the abstract to show that your resources are accessible. Good work! R-Bot6 (talk) 16:36, 1 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]