User talk:Jasani.5
Your submission at Articles for creation: sandbox (September 16)[edit]
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Hello! Jasani.5,
I noticed your article was declined at Articles for Creation, and that can be disappointing. If you are wondering or curious about why your article submission was declined please post a question at the Articles for creation help desk. If you have any other questions about your editing experience, we'd love to help you at the Teahouse, a friendly space on Wikipedia where experienced editors lend a hand to help new editors like yourself! See you there! Fiddle Faddle 10:54, 16 September 2014 (UTC)
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Gut flora[edit]
Thanks for your additions to the gut flora article. Just a few bits of feedback
- When discussing fecal transplants, terms like "poop pills" are a bit too colloquial for an encyclopaedia (and, given the mechanism of at least some transplants, it's also misleading).
- You added a section about probiotic use that's unreferenced. That's not good in itself, but since this section seems to be making health claims ("...take probiotics...to help digest, metabolism, and make efficient use of their food. While others...take it to maintain a stronger immune system, a healthy gastrointestinal tract, and efficient abundant microbiota") this is definitely problematic.
- What source are you citing to support the "therapeutic worms" bit? Is it this article? Looking at the abstract, it doesn't seem to be about therapeutic worms. The addition isn't clear, but it seems like it's overstating the generality of what's at best a new and unproven therapy. We have an article on helminthic therapy which suggests that the technique is far less developed than your edits suggest.
Bear in mind that medical-related topics should be consistent with the WP:MEDRS guideline. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:42, 18 November 2014 (UTC)
Response[edit]
- In this format, a formal scientific word such as pills that contain fecal mater from a different host is definitely more credible than poop pills
- My scientific inferences and opinions should be removed to keep the gut flora page on Wikipedia completely factual and highly scientific (so that this wiki search has full credibility from primary sources)
- I may have used more of my own knowledge from our evolution class to add to the edit on the article. But I would back the article on the helminthic therapy to explain how worms are used therapeutically.
Jasani.5 (talk) 21:24, 9 December 2014 (UTC)
Your draft article, User:Jasani.5/sandbox[edit]
Hello, Jasani.5. It has been over six months since you last edited your WP:AFC draft article submission, entitled "sandbox".
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Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. JMHamo (talk) 10:25, 27 May 2015 (UTC)