User talk:HarrietHKUGeology/sandbox

Hi! This is my talk page on the wikipage "Geology of Hong Kong".

Self Reflection

1. need to add more figures and photos (stratigraphic column of Hong Kong geology)
2. Improvements can be made on existing figures (increase resolution, add north direction signs on maps, scale bars, etc)
3. a gif can be made for the evolution diagram showing changes of tectonic setting in Hong Kong.
4. Typos are continually identified every time when I proofread the article. I should have a try on Grammarly.
5. For grammatical mistakes, I went for CAES consultation and they told me it is grammatically correct. Only a few very minor grammatical errors identified.
6. I have been converting terms into easier languages and cutting away too detailed descriptions for general public to understand.
7. It is quite lengthy when compared to my classmates' works. It is really difficult to choose which piece of information to keep there and which pieces to delete. However, a major target of editing the article is to make short sentences.
8. I would like to mention mining in Hong Kong in a few sentences. It is better to include one major mine (Ma On Shan mine) in Ma On Shan formation than making a new section on mining in Hong Kong.

Peer feedback

Feedback from Jupiter

Your page about "geology of Hong Kong" is well organized and good to include a "mining" section. However, some of the diagrams need to be improved for effective communication.

Here are some suggestions for your page:

1. For the introduction part, you may need to add some citations in the text, such as references for the percentages of rocks. More citations may be needed in the following text too.

2. For the map view figure showing Yangtze block and Cathaysia block, you may need to add a north arrow and scale bar. In addition, a map or satellite image showing the location of Hong Kong, in the beginning, may be helpful for your reader to understand the following maps and act as a good introduction.

3. For the "Geological evolution" section, a simple stratigraphic column of the formations will be useful for your reader to understand the bunch of formations and the sequence. A picture of some of the locations may be good for this section too, such as Bluff Head formation.

4. For the figure showing the thrust fault contact between Cretaceous Pat Sin Leng formation, you may need to add more details or index to show if it is a map or cross-section, and to make it more understandable. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jupmira104 (talk • contribs) 13:23, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback from Blessing

Your write-up is impressive and commendable. I have a few comments, please find them below.

1. You should generally revisit and rephrase many of your statements for correct grammatical expression.

2. It will be more educating if you can mention a few of the ore-deposits in Hong Kong you mentioned in the first paragraph.

3. Under regional geology (second paragraph) where you mentioned "Late Neoproterozoic (ca. 850million years ago)" I think the quoted age is not correct. You either wanted to write (about 600 - 550 Ma or ca. 500) or you change "Late" to "Middle" so that you can still retain 850 Ma. please check which is adequate.

4. There are a lot of important geological/technical terms that were not hyperlinked with other pages which are likely existing in Wikipedia. e.g. Geology itself, Devonian, Carboniferous, Permian, Jurassic, Sedimentary environment, Ore deposit, Hong Kong etc. A link of these geological periods to geological time scale will be fantastic. Also some of the important cities or town in Hong Kong may have social or historical significance and may already be existing on the Wikipedia. If you have mentioned some of these, try to link them up.

5. If you add a figure showing the stratigraphy of Hong Kong geology will complementary what you have.

5. I suggest you don't talk about mining in Hong Kong, which I see as a broader topic in itself.

6. You should try and reorder some of the citation order where two or more citations were used e.g. Under the Regional Geology,where you said "Until Devonian, crustal thickening causing tectonic uplift resulted an alluvial floodplain environment in Hong Kong.[3][1]". Citation [1] should come before [3]. There are a few others in the article. I know this is just minor!

7. In most of the references, you did not make correction for the dates. Remember to do this.

Cheers! — Preceding unsigned comment added by BlessingAdeoti (talk • contribs) 09:22, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback from Yuwei

Hi Harriet, your page is very well organized and easy for understanding, and these are some suggestions for your page:

• There are some spelling mistakes, such as “reteating”, “initally” in the third paragraph of “The Devonian”. Maybe you can use some program like "Grammarly" to help you find out the mistakes.
• For the figures, maybe it is better to put more details both in the figure and explanation.
• Adding a chart of geological time scale with main events happened might be good for understanding. — Preceding unsigned comment added by YuweiHGeo (talk • contribs) 03:20, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback from Anyang

Hi Harriet, here are my suggestions:

1. There are many typos, grammar mistakes, and poorly phrased expressions in your writing. Going to CAES for a check may be a time-saving option.

2. When demonstrating outcrop units, geological maps with the outcrop marked out or/and outcrop pictures should be useful.

3. It seems that you have cited your reference [1] & [2] a lot, which are books (reviews). If you can find original discovery papers, you should give credits to them. The easiest way is to find citations in those books you have used.

4. In each geological period of Hong Kong, you may want to include the specific ages of the events.

5. You may want to include the deformation events in your timeline, especially major ones in the Tertiary.

Adayding (talk) 09:57, 22 October 2018 (UTC)