Talk:Yin Yoga/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 12:28, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:59, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

Another one of your interesting articles :) I'll post my comments soon. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 12:28, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

• that are held for longer periods of time Makes me wonder longer compared to what

Fixed.

• Traditional Chinese Medicine Why in capitalized case?

Lower case it is.

• the tendons, fasciae, and ligaments Could use some links here

Added.

• Why so many refs in the lead? Anything from here missing in the main text?

Moved 'em out.

• 'Yin Yoga' appears a bit too much in the lead, especially the last para

Slimmed down.

• In the lead 'Taoist Yoga' needs to be linked on first mention and the other name 'Tao yin' used in the main text could probably be added here as well.

Linked first mention and added other name.

• yin-style poses What exactly are those? Is it the same as yin asanas—mostly sitting or lying postures? This explanation should then come earlier in the article

Reworded.

• Not sure why we have 2 paras in Roots in India and China

Closed up.

• Taoist Alchemy Why does alchemy start with 'A'?

Fixed.

• Earth, Metal, Water, Wood, and Fire Should these start with capital letters?

Yes, as these are the names of traditional elements.

• The yoga teacher Paul Grilley sought Zink out and studied with him When was this?

Added.

• Who is Garry Parker?

Glossed.

• Japanese scholar and yogi 'yogi' is a Sanskrit word giving the impression of a hermit, and I'm not sure everyone will grasp what it means.. should we say yoga practitioner instead?

Not really, but done.

• meridians, or subtle pathways and vessels A link for meridian would be good as in the lead

Done.

• parallel concepts of the nadi pathways nadi is in italics here but not in the lead

Formatted.

• Duplinks - Chinese medicine (Paul Grilley), hatha yoga (Yin and yang)

Removed.

• Because yin yoga does not make practitioners hot it needs to be 'Yin Yoga' consistently

Done.

• Two pics in the gallery at the bottom lack inline citations

Added.

• The date formats in refs could be more consistent (dmy/mdy, just year or just month or full date)

Done.

• URL in ref 4 is not working

Removed.

• ref. 37 needs page numbers

Replaced ref.

That's all I guess. Another lovely read :) Sainsf (talk · contribs) 14:02, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

Many thanks!

Nice work. 2 GAs in a day :D Sainsf (talk · contribs) 16:04, 18 April 2020 (UTC)