Talk:William Henry Harrison Seeley

William Henry Harrison Seeley is currently a Warfare good article nominee. Nominated by CommissarDoggo^Talk? at 19:41, 17 January 2024 (UTC)

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Short description: First American recipient of the Victoria Cross

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VC gazetted?[edit]

I found the Captain's report of the action, and the casualty report; but was unable to find any record of the VC award or presentation in the London Gazette. Narky Blert (talk) 19:00, 23 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:William Henry Harrison Seeley/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: CommissarDoggo (talk · contribs) 19:41, 17 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Czarking0 (talk · contribs) 23:04, 5 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello and thank you for your contributions. I think with a little bit of work this article can make GA.

As a side note I saw you had some Russian proficency and thought you might enjoy my recent article Zemstvo.

Now let's get to it

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	"By the 1850s, he was either a longshoreman or dock labourer." In my mind longshoreman is a type of dock labourer so you can just say that?
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Removed comment I had accidently copy pasted from another review Czarking0 (talk) 14:48, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	There is not much detail for the Chinese medal. The article seems to not even cover what it was for.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	I think this needs some work. The background section goes into far too much detail. 4-5 sentences is all that should be given not its own section.
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.

Comments[edit]

Ok, looking through the review I'll go through what you've added.

1a. I was completely unaware of that, I've now sorted that issue.

Done

2d. I'm not entirely sure what you mean by this one, when I was fixing 1a I searched for certain words included in your quote and couldn't find any mention of that, could you point out where in the article I used that?

My apologies, I meant to leave this comment on a different review. Done

3a. I actually remember searching for more information on this and didn't find anything about it, nor could I figure out what version of the China medal he would have received, so the mention will simply have to be removed.

Why removed? I thought the quote was notable but if that is all the info you can find I think you can leave it as is.

3b. I can cut this down, yes, and will get to that at some point today. CommissarDoggo^Talk? 05:14, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, I've sorted out 1a, removed the mention of the China medal as per 3a and have cut down the Background section as per 3b. As stated prior, I will need extra clarification for 2d as I'm now certain that there is nowhere in the article where that text is mentioned @Czarking0. CommissarDoggo^Talk? 11:13, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Responded Czarking0 (talk) 14:47, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
To clarify on the China medal, the quote will remain there, I've just removed the part prior to the quote where the medal is mentioned. There were two renditions of a medal for service in China, one for service during the First Opium War and another for service during the Boxer Rebellion.

He could well have been mentioning a specific award he won for conduct during the conflict or it could have been a wider conflict medal, but I'd simply rather have that specificity. CommissarDoggo^Talk? 15:04, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]