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"Among the First" vs "The first" boat with VPM.[edit]

Recently I made some edits to this page and to USS Oklahoma (SSN-802) to reflect which vessels will be equipped with the VPM modules. These were based on the USN Fact file pages on submarines which states "The next major change is the incorporation of the Virginia Payload Module (VPM), starting with the second Block V ship, SSN 803, currently under construction.", reflecting this I added the line "Arizona will be the second Block V boat and the first boat to feature the Virginia Payload" which was changed to "which will be among the first boats to feature the Virginia Payload Module" while minor this change could lead to confusion as it may lead some readers to believe that she will simply be the second boat to feature the VMP module, as that arguably fits within the description of "among the first". If the argument for changing the wording to "among" is something along the lines of "The boats may be commisioned out of order" I would say 1. This hasnt happend yet for any of the virginia class boats, and if its really a huge concern that the wording should be changed to "planned to be the first" not "among the first". I mention again that the source explicity states that VPM will start with SSN-803, implying that it is the first. paging Thewolfchild (talk · contribs) since you may have an opinion on this. Tamoraboys (talk) 04:34, 8 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Judging by the size of this comment, this seems to be really important, though it's not clear why that is. Does someone have some kind of connection to this boat? Or something else in the article? Anyway, I just saw a sentence that seemed somewhat clunky and made a minor change to it. It still conveys the same info, so I'm not sure why it has triggered this response. Have a nice day - wolf 05:23, 8 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I just would like the information to be as accurate as possible, and this edit makes it less so for the reasons I explained (that is to say that it doesnt quite convey the same information). If there is no other reason i think i will change it back since it does actually change the meaning of the sentence slightly. Tamoraboys (talk) 10:01, 8 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]