Talk:Smokin out the Window/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cherrell410 (talk · contribs) 18:58, 2 July 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   A number of sources are using - instead of –, as well as a number of sources are using DMY instead of MDY. Cherrell410 (talk) 23:42, 2 July 2023 (UTC)

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   Various discussion son the talk page about the title of the article

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   @MarioSoulTruthFan: Could we insert a picture of either Mars or .Paak?

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

   Leaving my suggestions for improvement below:

• Infobox: Is the chronology for Mars and .Paak's singles really necessary? Cherrell410 (talk) 19:29, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
• Lead: Aftermath Entertainment and Atlantic Records released the song as part of their debut studio album. This could possibly make the reader think that AE and AR are a band (if they aren't familiar with RLs), and that SS didn't actually release the song.
• Production and release: first para - quick question, all of that is included in the cd booklet? i don't have it so i wouldn't know...

Yes. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:01, 3 July 2023 (UTC)

• Production and release: second para - AE and AR released... --> the band released... under AE and AR, or something like at (as per above)
• Composition: put the refs immediately after the adjective

I fixed it in another way. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:09, 3 July 2023 (UTC)

• Music video: "It also won video of the year, ..." The article just talked about it winning video of the year at a different award show, could we transition this so that the name of the second awards show is first, or add a transition that distinctly depicts it as a completely different award show, if that makes any sense

 Done

Cherrell410 (talk) 23:38, 2 July 2023 (UTC)

I still have some doubts regarding the last amendment. Please take a look and let me know if I need to fix something else. Thank you for the quick review, as well. Cheers, MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:10, 3 July 2023 (UTC)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

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