Talk:Sîn-šumu-līšir

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Not really sure about the policy but it says there is little known of the king. Should this be in here or should it be included that little is know in comparison to other kings but this is what we know...? Coralshin (talk) 21:12, 8 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Late answer, but anyway. I think the point of that statement is to give the reason why little is known: his reign is period of chaos and disintegration. When people fight wars, civil wars, war with rebellious provinces, this tends to reduce such activities as putting stylus in a piece of clay to write history. This is an important point to make, because otherwise readers think Wikipedia is so incomplete. Jcwf (talk) 03:38, 5 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 05:53, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 05:53, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Discussion[edit]

Prose Suggestions[edit]

Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Biography[edit]

He was a eunuch and probably a prominent courtier already during the reign of Ashurbanipal (r. 669–631 BC). suggest He was a eunuch and probably already a prominent courtier during the reign of Ashurbanipal (r. 669–631 BC).
Apparently, an official by the name Nabu-rihtu-usur attempted to usurp the Assyrian throne with the help of another official called Sin-shar-ibni. suggest An official named Nabu-rihtu-usur attempted to seize the Assyrian throne with the help of another official called Sin-shar-ibni.
As the king's rab ša rēši, it is likely that Sin-shumu-lishir helped Ashur-etil-ilani to stop the would-be usurpers and their conspiracy appears to have been crushed relatively quickly. suggest As the king's rab ša rēši, it is likely that Sin-shumu-lishir played a role in suppressing the conspiracy, which appears to have been crushed relatively quickly.
Sin-shumu-lishir is also recorded as having been rewarded land by Ashur-etil-ilani, possibly as a reward for his aid to the king. suggest Sin-shumu-lishir is also recorded as receiving land from Ashur-etil-ilani, possibly as a rewards for his service to the king.
containing the image of a beardless king (Assyrian kings were always depicted with beards but eunuchs were always depicted beardless) could depict Sin-shumu-lishir. suggest containing the image of a beardless king could depict Sin-shumu-lishir, as Assyrian kings were always depicted with beards but eunuchs were always depicted beardless.
@Ichthyovenator: that is all my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 12:04, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Iazyges: Thanks! Implemented all your suggestions as before. Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:47, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]