Talk:Our Father (Dexter)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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The article looks good, and there are just a few minor things that I've found.

Lead section:

I found the phrasing of one sentence a little awkward: "Dexter's girlfriend Rita Bennett (Julie Benz) was revealed to be pregnant for the writers to explore Dexter's psychological and emotional reactions, and Dexter kills an innocent person to explore the ongoing theme of rebellion despite the writers' initially rejecting the idea of Dexter killing "somebody who doesn't deserve it"." -- It jumps back and forth between fictional events and real-life without really bridging the gap. I would prefer something closer to "In order to allow them to explore Dexter's psychological and emotional reactions, the writers revealed Dexter's girlfriend Rita Bennett (Julie Benz) to be pregnant. They also had Dexter kill an innocent person to develop the ongoing theme of rebellion despite initially rejecting the idea of Dexter killing "somebody who doesn't deserve it"...if that makes sense and clarifies my concern.

Done, thanks for the suggestion. —97198 (talk) 10:15, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Plot:

It seems like it would make more sense to move Nick Hermz's real name to after the mention of his character's name.

I thought so too, but decided that it was better as it is now because the character is dead (and the actor doesn't make any further appearances) once the character's name is revealed. —97198 (talk) 10:15, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Can you expand a little on how Dexter kills him? This seems like an important point in the episode, so (brief) clarification would be nice -- does he shoot him, hit him, etc.?

Stabbed; added in. —97198 (talk) 10:15, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"as well as changing her hairstyle" - this doesn't seem grammatically correct. Perhaps "Debra is turning over a new leaf and has changed her hairstle and given up men, alcohol and cigarettes."?

Makes sense to me but changed anyway. —97198 (talk) 10:15, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Production:

Is it standard practice in television articles to write "season 3" instead of "season three"? It seems inconsistent with Wikipedia's usual numbering guidelines, but I imagine that you are more familiar with this than I am.

I'm not too sure - I just go by the title naming conventions, e.g. in Lost (season 3) or Veronica Mars (season 3). —97198 (talk) 10:15, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"an opportunity to play a character who he had not played before" - this phrasing seems a little off, as it is a character type he had not played before.

Changed to "a character dissimilar to any he had played before". —97198 (talk) 10:15, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Reception:

Can nothing be added to the first paragraph? I like to avoid single-sentence paragraphs when possible.

Nothing more to be found on ratings, I'm afraid. The only thing I could do is split the sentence into two! —97198 (talk) 10:15, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

An introductory sentence would be nice in the second paragraph. Without it, it's just a list of quotations.

Done. —97198 (talk) 10:15, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Images/References: No problems here. Fair use image has appropriate rationale. References are properly formatted, and external links are all working.

I will place this nomination on hold to allow for these concerns to be addressed and/or discussed. Any comments or questions can be left here or on my talk page. Best wishes, GaryColemanFan (talk) 17:47, 21 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Everything should be good. Thanks for the review! —97198 (talk) 10:15, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Thanks for the quick replies. I will promote the article in a few minutes. GaryColemanFan (talk) 04:58, 24 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]