Talk:No. 79 Wing RAAF/GA1
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Reviewer: Nick-D (talk · contribs) 22:51, 3 February 2012 (UTC)
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To my slight surprise, I've never edited this article, so I think that I can review it neutrally. My comments on it are:
- "Its combat units included" - this makes it sound like there might have been more than just the four squadrons.
- "the Beaufighters attacked enemy shipping" - replace 'enemy' with 'Japanese'
- "On 19 April, Eaton organised a large raid against Su, Dutch Timor," - did he plan the raid on this day, or was it conducted on this day? This sentence should also be split into two sentences
- "On the day of the Allied landings, 22 April, the Mitchells and Beaufighters made a daylight raid on Dili, Portuguese Timor. The ground assault met little opposition, credited in part to the air bombardment in the days leading up to it." - this is a bit confusing, as it implies that Dili was the target of the ground assault. I'd suggest tweaking this.
- If possible, you might also want to mention whether the raids on Timor were conducted as a diversionary operation or whether they aimed to destroy Japanese forces on the island that could have interfered with the Allied landings (or both)
- "attacked enemy positions in Timor" - see above
- You might want to note that No. 2 and No. 18 Squadrons were the only RAAF units which operated Mitchells.
- Sounds plausible, will check for a source explicitly mentioning that. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 01:35, 4 February 2012 (UTC)
- The RAAF Museum says this. Nick-D (talk) 10:16, 4 February 2012 (UTC)
- Sounds plausible, will check for a source explicitly mentioning that. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 01:35, 4 February 2012 (UTC)
- Was the wing actually deployed to New Britain? The attack on the Isuzu took place well within the NEI, well out of range of this island.
- Did I say it was deployed to NB? I mean I think it was at the time, according to Odgers, and was going to put that in. He did say the Mitchells were at the very limit of their range, and couldn't even wait for the Liberators before attacking.
- Tks for your comments, as usual, Nick! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 01:35, 4 February 2012 (UTC)
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