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West Point: "Tiered down" could use some explanation. Also this looks like an awfully long paragraph for one citation, perhaps separate citations to each volume of the register would help (page numbers?).
Ante-Bellum: I believe antebellum is more usual, and perhaps "era" would be clearer. Is it proper to say he was commissioned a brevet 2/Lt? It seems to me that he was brevetted as a 2/Lt before being commissioned on December 7th. Is the rank of Major General one that the local militia could elect one to? My impression is that during this period militia elected officers up to regimental commanders, but general officers were appointed by the governor.
1861-1862 CSA is undefined (Army? of America?)
1863, 1864, 1865 "That preceded against the bad conditions of artillery ammunition" ?? "the promotion policy for the western artillery was lacking in the higher echelons" ?? Perhaps the discussion of rank could be put in an explanatory note, or a separate subsection.
Notes: AOG and OR are undefined. --Lineagegeek (talk) 21:12, 6 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Tiered down" replaced by common expression at West Point (with explanating link).
Long paragraph split in two.
According referencess are more detailed now.
"commissioned" replaced by "appointed".
The code of the laws of Mississippi (including the most recent ones from 1854 and from 1857) called for an election of all militia (general) officers, so this is correct.
"CSA" replaced by "army"
Made a new section for the artillery board.
(Hopefully) clarified the promotion policy.
Reformed AOG and ORs into full references.
Will look for more information for the rank discussion before doing something.
I think I have adressed all of your points, hope you approve my solutions. And thanks for the assessment ... GELongstreet (talk) 13:45, 7 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
