Talk:Homeric Hymns/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: UndercoverClassicist (talk · contribs) 10:22, 1 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: The Morrison Man (talk · contribs) 21:33, 19 April 2024 (UTC)

I'll be taking a look at the article and should be back with comments in the next few days. The Morrison Man (talk) 21:33, 19 April 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for taking it on: looking forward to your comments. UndercoverClassicist ^T·C 09:15, 20 April 2024 (UTC)

@The Morrison Man: Sorry to nudge, but any update? UndercoverClassicist ^T·C 11:51, 6 May 2024 (UTC)

Apologies for the major delay, I've been quite sick recently. I've included the notes for the sections composition and collection and transmission below, the rest will follow within 24 hours. If you have any questions or things are unclear, let me know! The Morrison Man (talk) 22:40, 6 May 2024 (UTC)

Composition

• “though the Hymn to Ares is considerably later” - Maybe change this to something like “though the Hymn to Ares was made much later”.
• “are composed in dactylic hexameter” - Perhaps this could be explained, as you do for the following mention of formulae.
• “one of the Homeridae,” - Swap out the comma for a colon.
• “hymns’ comparative absence” - Comparative could probably be left out here.
• “However, few direct statements denying Homer's authorship of the Hymns survive from antiquity: in the second century CE, the Greek geographer Pausanias maintained their attribution to Homer.” - I think this would work better as two separate sentences, cut off at the colon. That would make something like: “However, few direct statements denying Homer’s authorship of the Hymns survive from antiquity. The Greek geographer Pausanias maintained their attribution to Homer in the second century CE.”.

Collection and transmission

• “At least the longer hymns” - Leave out at least.
• There are now two conflicting timespans for the Hellenistic period in the article. Previously mentioned as post-323 BCE, and here mentioned as 323-30 BCE. The latter is correct, and I’d change the former accordingly.
• “listed as today "Homeric"” - “which we currently list as “Homeric””
• Perhaps also link Callimachus here, and is there no bluelink for Proclus or his Hymns?
• “are fifteenth-century in date” - date to the fifteenth century
• “along with Orphic and other hymnic poetry.” - along with other Hymns and Orphic poetry.
• Explain siglum in brackets.
• Link philologist
• “discovered M” - maybe change to “discovered manuscript M”? (not essential)
• “M has among its sources a lost manuscript” - “One of the sources M draws from is a lost manuscript”
• “which he stated he had” - “which he stated to have”
• “that manuscript has also been suggested as being Ω” - “it has also been suggested that Ψ and Ω represent the same manuscript”

more to follow